Okay then, Marie, I'm afraid you still have too many ability dots. You have 43 ability dots spent before counting the ones that are over 3, and you're supposed to only have 39. As for your BP expenditures, you have:
Abilities raised by BP
Medicine 4 1 BP
Resitance 4 1 BP
Awareness 4 1 BP
Dodge 5 2 BP
Even though your Resistance and Awareness aren't even rated at 3 in your ability list. And Awareness isn't even favored for you anyway. If you get rid of those two expenditures, that gives you 2 extra BP.
Anyway, a small formatting issue is that your favored and aspect abilities are listed between your abilities. They're sort of between Earth and Water. Maybe it'd be best of you put an asterisk before the names of your favored and aspect abilities to signify that they're favored and aspect, instead of listing them separately.
Finally, your backgrounds could do with a little cleaning. They should look like this:
Resources:3 ST Provided
Resources:4 2 BP
Retainers:2 ST Provided
Retainers:3 1 BP
Retainers:4&5 4 BP
Breeding:3 3 Creation Points
Connections(The Directorate-Stores):2 2 Creation Points
Connectons(The Shogunate):2 2 Creation Points
Family:3 3 BP
Connections(Gens Karal):3 3 BP
Artifact(Jade Reinforced Buff Jacket,Jade Skin Mount Amulet, Jade Hearth Stone Bracers):3 3 creation Points
Manse(Healers Stone, Opal of the Hunted):2 2 creation points
Hearth Stone Descriptions:
Opal of the Hunted (MANSE 2)
This green and violet opal with gold flecks helps the bearer detect ambushes, not be followed and increases their DV against unexpected attacks,
Stone of Healing +3 medicine rolls made by player.
Jade Hearth Stone Bracers
Jade: The character's attacks get a -1 speed bonus
This set of bracers has a single hearthstone setting and provide a three-die bonus to the wearer's Dodge pool. It provides additional benefits dependent on the material.
Skin Mount Amulet
Appearing as a large rivet-style body piercing made of one of the magical materials with an indented
disk-shaped socket, skin mount amulets are nothing more than implanted hearthstone amulets (see Exalted,
p. 380) that require no attunement. The design of these amulets also confers an additional number of motes
of Peripheral Essence to the wearer’s maximum Essence pool equal to twice the rating of any hearthstone
placed in the socket. Mountain Folk, God-Blooded and other non-Exalted Essence channelers instead add
these motes to their singular Essence pools. Mortals normally incapable of channeling Essence may attune
to manses if they have one of these devices installed, gaining the usual benefi ts of any hearthstone from
an attuned manse installed in the stone. Mortals also gain the aforementioned bonus motes as a meager
Essence pool that they can recharge only through the inset stone but may otherwise use as if they were
Exalted. Any commitments using Essence from the amulet (such as to other artifacts) immediately end if
the hearthstone leaves its socket. At the height of the First Age, skin mount amulets were a popular form
of jewelry among the Chosen. Hearthstones can be removed or replaced in a skin mount amulet as readily
as any other type of hearthstone amulet. Only the socket itself is actually riveted to the body.
Surgery: 10/5 hours/3/3
Total Background Ratings:
Retainers:5(10 Combat Medics, 10 Various Staff to run her Household and base of operations)
Family(Exalted Karal Kagobe Exalted Karal Kagobe the II, Exalted Yushoto, Iyde Married into the Karal Gen:3
Artifact(Jade Reinforced Buff Jacket,Jade Skin Mount Amulet, Jade Hearth Stone Bracers):3
Manse(Healers Stone, Opal of the Hunted):4
The last sheet you posted had a Gem of Injury Sense still, which I thought you'd decided to change to an Opal of the Hunted, so I fixed that here.
I guess we should start looking into who all already knows each other.
Well, I believe the only character relations that have already been decided is Whispers and Fury being good friends and Fyr and Dusk being fuck buddies.
Other than that, I encourage you guys to have some pre-existing connections with each other.
Zaer, nothing to point out. Your sheet looks good still.