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Offline AevalTopic starter

broken and shattered
« on: February 20, 2010, 11:23:22 PM »
A word, a whisper ,questions- inquiring
Answers to unknown feelings required.
Truth, honesty always so rare:
Passions open: the next step do you dare?

Accepting ,expecting- emotions protecting
Touching, caressing , wishes directing-
The hurt that waits behind each door.
Be careful , be cautious with desiring more.

The tension building and hopes increasing
As your heart opens, he walks in..
All is given , signed, sealed, delivered
Only to be returned :broken and withered.

Head bent, heart in pieces..
Hope, love, desire: all ceases..
Pieces of a life blown and  scattered
Remnants torn, her soul forever battered.

Offline Kurzyk

Re: broken and shattered
« Reply #1 on: February 21, 2010, 12:41:13 AM »
Very chilling. I enjoyed the flow and the rhymes were smooth. Loved the buildup and how it left the reader scattered in the wind.

Thanks for sharing.

Offline Airressa

Re: broken and shattered
« Reply #2 on: February 21, 2010, 01:35:14 AM »
Love this.
Beautifully written, the rhythm was perfection.
:nods in agreement to Kurzyk:

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Re: broken and shattered
« Reply #3 on: April 01, 2010, 11:34:51 PM »
This was hauntingly beautiful Aeval. I wish I could write poetry, just never could get it down.