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Offline Le Immortelle

Re: [NC][Hiring TWO Female Investigators and TWO Female Criminals.] Burden City
« Reply #175 on: October 16, 2010, 01:46:49 PM »
Act I. The Profile
Appearance:
Birth Name: Monica Cozzi
Name: Monica Cozzi
Alias: The Black Princess, Baroness of Blood
Age: 24
Sex: Female
Orientation: Bisexual
Profession: Criminal
Role: Brigadier
Alignment: Crime Lord

Act II. The Diagnostics
Height: 6'0"
Weight: 145 lbs
Hair: Brunette, short.
Eyes: Blue
Skin: Fair but somewhat tanned
Birth Mark: None
Tattoos: 1. Tattoo of a sword covered with thorned roses on her right forearm. 2. Dragon on her left bicep. 3. Skull on her right bicep
Distinguishable Mark/Scar: None

Act III. The Dossier
Likes: She enjoys ruling over others with an iron fist. A natural domme, she likes to watch others squirm in front of her. Loves cigarettes, whiskey and occasionally heroin. Likes to expand her empire. Prefers electronic music, in her spare time loves to read and paint.
Dislikes: Honest cops, common folk who she considers to be below her. Anyone who stand in her expansion plans. People who are working under who fuck up deals or attempt to double cross her.
Attitude: Monica is a complicated person. She's as merciless as they come yet at times she showers certain special ones with care and affections. Which particularly spread to some of her lovers. She's a strong woman who has had to encounter lot of obstacles to reach where she is and even more ones to stay in that position. She's an extremely charismatic leader and can motivate her troops, which has often turned the tables against cops. The never say die attitude, in a place where most people's loyalties can be bought in a flash has won her lot of admiration of most of the criminals in the city.
Habit/Twitch: When lost in thoughts, often she ends up repeatedly moving her hands through her hair..making them all messy.
Quote: There's two kinds of people who are in this town, those who agree with me and those who are dead.
Weapons: Beretta 92, IMI Desert Eagle. At times prefers AK-47's but it's rarely. Also carries a gold zip lighter which she inherited from her father.
History: Monica was born in a family which was already involved in crime. Her father controlled the Burden city Mafia and as a result she led a privileged life since childhood. Although that didn't mean it was happy because neither her mother or her father were there for her. The family was quite dysfunctional with often spats between her parents when one day her father, Benjamin lost it and hit her mother so many times that it ultimately caused her death. The whole thing was hushed and the body was taken care of, which effectively made Monica even more lonely. Since she entered early teens she began to show more and more interest in her father's business although he wanted her to get married to someone he had picked out for her. The stalemate continued for few years but she gained more insights of the game slowly as she pursued her father to let him work with him and she promised to marry the boy her father had picked for her. At the age of 19, when he wedding was taking place she pulled out her gun during the ceremony and emptied it on her fiance and her father. By then she had bought out most of Ben's men and whoever was loyal to him was wiped out in one giant massacre at the Church and proclaimed herself as the leader. Anyone who opposed also went the same way as her father did, eventually she organised her people in systematic way and made them a force to be reckoned with.

Eventually when Lady Ana's dominance spread over the city, she decided to join the forces with the woman and gained an entry into inner circle due to her own brand of ruthless rule coupled with exceptional efficiency, and the ability to produce results no matter what happens.

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Re: [NC][Hiring TWO Female Investigators and TWO Female Criminals.] Burden City
« Reply #176 on: October 17, 2010, 03:39:10 AM »
Act I. The Profile

Birth Name: William Harrison Bert.

Name: William Bert.

Alias: DJ Stewart N. Ark.

Age: 37-years-old (current) and 27 to 35 years-old (apparent)

Sex: Male.

Orientation: Heterosexual.

Profession: DJ of BC 93.23 radio station

Role: Victim.

Alignment: Neutral but will grudgingly align with the Detective if Burden City depends on it.



Act II. The Diagnostics

Height: 6 feet and 6 inches.

Weight: 209 pounds.

Hair: Chocolate brown, sleek and messy, his hair touches the back of his neck and tips of his ears in curling locks.

Eyes: Light gray blue.

Skin: Normal, with a slight tan to it.

Birth Mark: None.

Tattoos: None.

Distinguishable Mark/Scar: His mustache and beard, both light and scruffy looking.



Act III. The Dossier

Likes: William likes Burden City the most - the good things he can see at least, not the bad things that seems to be happening all the damn time.. He was born and raised there, and so he came to look, to find, to investigate and to see the few, few good things the city seems to have. And he honestly doesn't mind that, seeing that he loves to be a nosy bastard. He loves to question others, nitpick and second guess all those around him. He enjoys getting into verbal and logical fights over anything that may spark something deep in him. Especially if it'll concern Burden City somehow.

He likes activity and bustling and hustling about. Movements, sounds, smells, actions or any other signs of life, William likes it. The noise, the rush, the crowds of people - he loves them all. William enjoys being in the urban jungle, taking a long, meaningless walk in the masses of people and just seeing life and activity out there in general. He rather be with the people than be by himself no matter what and just simply be there and nothing else. He just likes enjoying the rush of adrenaline and the shivery feelings in him from being so close yet so far from all these souls.

He also can appreciate a good drink or smoke every once and a while after a hard day's work in the radio station, though he can also go without them and just read a good book or watch some cheap horror flick to wind down from the day's events. William loves a good, long and nasty roll in the old hay sack, especially if its' with some stranger he's certain he'll never see again after said roll. While he isn't too keen for an intimate relationship at the moment, he does like having close and personal friendships like the one he has with Margaret Asher. He likes meaningful, deep conversation that can last for hours or a witty banter between others. Or just close contact with someone you can trust.

Most of all, he adores his job since it gives him freedom of speech and being able to say what he damn pleases ( a few more likes of his, to no one's surprise). He enjoys talking to the people of his him, letting his voice be heard and people being able to say what they want to say. He likes the contemplating silence that comes in his breaks, the hard research and investigation he needs to do for the daily Criminal Update News and interviews he does. He likes trying to get people to see more and open their eyes, trying to raise awareness in others and to not depend on the police force if possible.

Dislikes: Anyone attempting to censor, control or all but stop him and his words on the radio or any form of media is what he despises the most, though the police force of Burden City runs in quite close. He hates the blatant corruption and curelty that seems to fester and grow among the 'finest people' in his city. He also hates the outright disrespect and borderline abuse towards the citizens. He seems to particularly dislike Detective Hastings the most among the police force, for reasons he won't divulge to others he does not know well.

He also dislikes people trying to block or stop him during his investigations or interviews or radio castings for any reason that's selfish or for profit. No exceptions. He dislikes people that are bribing or tempting him to hide the truth or anything he feels like others should know about. Especially if they are trying to cover their own asses, because he hates cowardliness and people not admitting to their faults. William also dislikes being alone by himself when he wants to talk or listen to someone, or if someone is there but don't want to talk or pay attention to him.

William hates mindless activities or tasks, thinking nothing but wasting time in an unproductive manner.  Anyone that hurts his close friends or relationships is immediately here on his dislikes. People who disrespect or harass others just of feel more powerful or use their tragic backstory, a 'sob story' as he calls it, to justify their violent or cruel actions too.

Attitude: William is a cynic that likes to talk a lot if given the chance. And, unfortunately for many people (read: all of the people that work for entire police force of Burden City), he is also a well-versed, intelligent cynic that likes to talk a lot via radio. He has a dry wit mixed with deadly sarcasm, which earned him the nickname 'DJ Stewart N. Ark'. He's passionate in what he believes in but can also be reserved and polite.

He is loyal and kind to those he knows well, but the key word here is 'well'. Since 'well' here means 'a long time that is often plighted with suspicion and frustration for both parties'. He is a paranoid man that believes the way you should live life is to not believe in anything and question everything. Naturally, he sees the bad in everything and everyone no matter what they do or say, though he struggles to also see good in them because life would sure stink if he was simply negative.

Though he tries to be optimistic with the everyday people, he is distrustful of authority and those with power over him. He doesn't mean to, it's just in his nature now to look at the powerful and expect the worst. William can also relax himself if he wants to. Even then, though, he is forever thinking, pondering and making remarks and even attempts to 'fix' this or that. As in he writes between the margins of a book or calls up the radio station he's listening in attempts of correction. This is because he loves to observe and try to do something, but it comes off as annoying instead to many.

Habit/Twitch: Fiddles with his glasses, wiping the lenses as he talks about something important.

Quote: “Cynics are made, not born.”

Weapons:

Guns:

Ruger SR9 (Keeps a magazine on him in his inner jacket pocket. 14 bullets in it.)

Hand held:

Retractable baton (Keeps it with him at all times tied to his belt.)

Chemicals:

None.

History: William was born in Burden City in the year 1973 to a middle class family that was just trying to get by here in the area. He was raised in a typical childhood, two parents that worked but loved him and two older siblings that teased but cared for his well being, with no trauma or heartache that personally happened to him. While he did see many of those around him; like his neighbors and friends and strangers, get hurt or betrayed by the police or Criminals, it never happened to him.

When he was 18-years-old in the year 1991, when he was finally the age to leave, William instead stayed there to get his college education and a job instead. Unlike his brother and sister, who both left the moment they could. He felt attached to Burden City, no matter how tough or horrible it became and how hopeless it looked for it. He can't explain himself why even today, but he just does. He also had to take care of his father after his mother finally died after a long and painful battle with leukemia.

He got his diploma from college when he was 24-years-old, six years after making his choice to stay. While there in college, he watched politics more through either radio or TV, observed the police more and generally just looked at the powerful and rich with new eyes now. And he didn't like what he saw. He saw corruption, pain and misery being peddled out like candy and the actual good people either swayed to their side or forced to leave. It made him a bit bitter, to say the least. When he got his diploma on that stage in 1997, he vowed to somehow help Burden City.

It was in the form of the small radio station, BC 92.32. Getting a job there a year later, he managed to convince the others to have the Criminal Update News segment. Where he'll announce rumors, facts and stories about the crimes here in Burden City in an attempt to get others to do something. It became a cult hit with devoted listeners and it has gotten William in hot water more than once with the police force. He was arrested three times for giving out information that wasn't 'properly' allowed to be sent out yet and was threatened more than once. He made a bit of a stir in 2006 when he tried to call out Investigator Angus Fraser for destroying evidence in a rape case the involved his friend, Margaret Asher. He currently is still in Burden City and part of the station, still attempting his crusade with corruption with his words. Whether they like it or not.

Possible Crimes for Victims
[Yes - No - Attempt]
Robbery: Yes
Kidnapping: Yes
Assault: Yes
Arson: No
Blackmail: Yes
Forced Criminal Activity: Yes
Rape: Attempt
Murder: No

Offline Dashenka

Re: [NC][Hiring TWO Female Investigators and TWO Female Criminals.] Burden City
« Reply #177 on: October 17, 2010, 06:14:27 AM »
Act I. The Profile


Birth Name: Staicey Veronica Walker
Name: Staicey Walker
Alias: "Tommy"
Age: 29
Sex: Female
Orientation: Bisexual
Profession: Car Thief
Role: Criminal
Alignment: Neutral

Act II. The Diagnostics

Height: 6'0
Weight: 114 lbs
Hair: Dirty blonde
Eyes: Brown
Skin: Lit brown/Pink
Birth Mark: No
Tattoos: No
Distinguishable Mark/Scar: No

Act III. The Dossier

Likes: Staicey likes cars and everything with it. Ever since her youth in Burden City, she's into technical things but mostly the ones on wheels. She can keep any car running or make them run again and can do all the possible works you'd ever want on or in your car. Because of her hobby, she hung out with boys a lot and took over a lot of their behaviour. You won't see Staicey in a dress or on heels. This is where she got her nick name, Tom boy, Tommy. If she's not in a garage, stealing a car or on the race track, you can find her in the gym.

Dislikes: She hates girls who are depending on their boys. She is a great follower of the Girl power principle and anybody not into that, can expect to be ignored. Her 'posse' knows that she's in control and although Staicey encourages own initiative, do not make the mistake of making decisions for her.

Attitude: Very easy going if you follow her rules. Knows where she stands in society and who to mess with and who not.

Habit/Twitch: Compulsive speeding.

Quote: There goes the good old neighbourhood

Weapons: 9mm Colt. Aged but still leathal.

History: Soon she found out that making an honest living in this city was very hard, so she resolved to car theft and export. Once she would steal a car, she would either export it out of the city or change a car's identity so that it could never be traced. This business is making a lot of money with enough corrupted politicians wanting a new car. Staicey works in a small gang with two other girls. Julia 'Phoenix' Prestwick has been working with her since very young. They share a house and maybe even more than just the house. Jessica 'Tiny' Taylor-Brooklyn has joined the posse not too long ago. Nobody knows why she got 'invited' in but she's suffered some hard training at the hands of Staicey and Julia.
« Last Edit: October 17, 2010, 10:38:10 AM by Dashenka »

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Re: [NC][Hiring TWO Female Investigators and TWO Female Criminals.] Burden City
« Reply #178 on: October 17, 2010, 08:17:26 AM »
Dashenka, your character has been approved for the game. Welcome aboard to Burden City.  :-)

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Re: [NC][Hiring TWO Female Investigators and TWO Female Criminals.] Burden City
« Reply #179 on: October 18, 2010, 04:31:14 AM »
Act I. The Profile
Birth Name: Evie Ann Anderson
Name: Evie Anderson
Alias: N/A
Age: Currant- 25 Apparent-21
Sex: Female
Orientation: Heterosexual
Profession: Investigator
Role: Investigator
Alignment: Detective

Act II. The Diagnostics
Height: 5'4
Weight: 103lb
Hair: Blond
Eyes: bright blue
Skin: pale
Birth Mark: nope
Tattoos: a Tiger Lilly on her right shoulder
Distinguishable Mark/Scar: nope

Act III. The Dossier
Likes: Coffee, dominate possessive guys, confidence, high heels, clove cigarettes, tiger lilies, fast cars and the rain.
Dislikes: Roses, the heat, liars,  followers, and nagging people.
Attitude: Evie is driven and when she's working she is focused nothing can pull her away but off the job she's another person. Where at work she is stiff, professional focused, outside of work she'd fun happy outgoing andjust a lot of fun to be around. She gets along with people easily and has never had a major problem with anyone besides the minor jealousy issues. She is extremely competitive in nature and can't stand loosing in any form.
Habit/Twitch:Smokes when she's stressed, insomniac, can't wake up without coffee.
Quote: "Leave me alone I slept last week" Evie
Weapons: Standard issue 9mm, hand cuffs, riot stick, and bullet proof vest. Also a Taser and Mace.
History: Evie grew up in a rough part of town, drugs, prostitution, gangs it was all there at her door step. It was amazing she made it threw high school without getting caught up in some gang, hooked on drugs or 'in love' with some loser guy. But make it threw high school she did and she owed it to her mother a strong woman who never let Evie think for a minute she couldn't do something as long as she was willing to work hard for it. her mother wouldn't let her little girl fail as she did and with her support Evie learned to expect high standards from herself.

Evie's life really started when she went to collage, she like many had no idea what she was going to do with her life, she just knew she wanted to succeed for herself and her mom in whatever she found for herself. She was driven and excelled in her classes but had no direction, at least that was true until her mom was killed. It was a defining moment in her life when Evie's mom was killed senselessly hit by a car walking home from the park early one morning.

Because of her moms death Evie became interested in law enforcement, she loved psychology it being her favorite class at he moment so she finished collage with a degree in psychology and went into the academy. The same as everything else she exceeded in it her inner drive compelling her to be the best. She was one of the people who wouldn't let herself fail.

As she moved around for a while before settling she kept going to school for diffrent things, she took a few classes in foresics, she learned to really drive, and worked on the side. She enjoyed going to school, having a deep love of learning and a curiosity that seemed endless.

After a year in small town she earned rank and was able to transfer and being a glutton for challenge she picked the city with the highest crime rate in the country Burden City. She looked towards the horizon with glee hoping to carve out a niche for herself in the world and make a difference in a place that was being over run by people she couldn't stand.
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Re: [NC][Hiring TWO Female Investigators and TWO Female Criminals.] Burden City
« Reply #180 on: October 18, 2010, 08:07:52 AM »
LimitlessNikkie, your character has been approved for the game. Welcome aboard to Burden City.

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Re: [NC][Hiring] Burden City
« Reply #181 on: October 19, 2010, 04:33:52 PM »
Was invited to put in a criminal, tell me what you think. I admit my posting schedule is kind of wonky, so I went for something open as possible. Tell me what you think.

Edit:- First idea just seemed too complicated. Here's the update.

Act I. The Profile
Birth Name: Thomas Cooper
Name: Internally, he calls himself "The Alpha" - it's worth mentioning that Tommy is more then a little insane.
Alias: "The Wolf Man"
Age: Late-20's.
Sex: Male
Orientation: Heterosexual
Profession: A gifted computer programmer, Thomas lives comfortably in a suburban home on the edge of Burden City. He is also considered a gifted amateur triathlete and wilderness survival expert- though not good enough to go professional.
Role: Criminal
Alignment: Neutral, leans Crime Lord if only to get away from Detectives.

Act II. The Diagnostics
Height: 6'2"
Weight: 194 pounds, with a muscular build.
Hair: Shaved, though does wear wigs and toupees.
Eyes: Blue
Skin: Caucasian
Birth Mark: None
Tattoos: None
Distinguishable Mark/Scar: None per so, though his sexual partners- both consensual and non-consensual, will attest to a large penis.

Act III. The Dossier
Likes: Rape, Domination, Sexually Submissive Women, Motorcycles, Working Out, Triathlons, Computers, and Technology.
Dislikes: Uppity Women, Socially Submissive Men, Computer Bugs, Abortions [But only when he is the biological father].
Attitude: Like someone who thinks they are a human Alpha Male. He sees himself as the physical, mental, and sexual pinnacle of human potential and as such there are things he just deserves. Like to sleep with your wife. Usually this just comes off as confidence.
Habit/Twitch: Besides being responsible for a dozens of rapes across Burden City? He's an absolute health nut with his diet and exercises religiously- to the point where both occasionally interfere with his job. If he wasn't so good at programming he probably would have been fired long ago.
Quote: "Don't pretend you didn't love it."
Weapons: None, though his physical strength is in itself an impressive weapon.

History: Thomas's life began going downhill at age six when his father left his mother, with two kids and pregnant with a third, to run off with his secretary. His mother didn't take it well and joined an extremist Christian religious sect. His mother's new religious beliefs included the idea that men were inherently more sinful then women and all expressions of sexuality, especially male sexuality, is inherently sinful. When Thomas turned 13 his mother's younger sister thought she was helping when she strapped him to a table and raped him for the first time. How many times he was sexually abused by his aunt was unknown- but by the time he left for college it was enough that his aunt had given birth to 4 children. All of which Thomas was believed to be the father. At some point during this time he became fixated on the idea that the act of fathering children was the strongest assurance of manhood and he became obsessed with both fathering children and making himself the human equivalent of an alpha male.

Assisted by the large penis and high male fertility he inherited from his father, he donated sperm as often as possible. Discovering his knack for computer programming early in college he'd often celebrate physical milestones by breaking into the computers at fertility clinics and changing things around so that women would be impregnated by his sperm thinking they were being impregnated by their husbands/lovers/anonymous donors. When a car wreck claimed the life of his aunt and two of his "cousins" - in reality his oldest two children - his already delicate sanity snapped.

Thomas, seeing himself as the human alpha male, is know obsessed with the idea of fathering children being a sign of masculinity and his self-identity has begun to fracture. Now he spends as much time as he can outside, stalking victims like a hunter stalks prey.

MO: Preferred Victims: Attractive Women within child-bearing years. Usually victim selection is random, he sets up camp in an outdoor setting and rapes the first attractive woman he thinks he can get away with bringing down. Mostly he concentrates on public parks but anything that seems out-doorsy is fair game to him. Never uses a condom, and usually ambushes his victims with sheer physical force.
« Last Edit: October 19, 2010, 05:20:04 PM by TheVillain »

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Re: [NC][Hiring] Burden City
« Reply #182 on: October 19, 2010, 05:36:33 PM »
TheVillian, your character has been approved for the game. Welcome aboard to Burden City.

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Re: [NC][Hiring] Burden City
« Reply #183 on: October 21, 2010, 05:17:28 PM »
Act I. The Profile
Birth Name: Damian Scott
Alias: n/a
Age: 19
Sex: male
Orientation:gay
Profession: artist
Role: victim
Alignment: neutral

Act II. The Diagnostics
Height: 6'
Weight: 150 pounds
Hair: blond hair, shoulder length
Eyes: ice blue
Skin: fair skin
Birth Mark: n/a
Tattoos: n/a
Distinguishable Mark/Scar: n/a

Act III. The Dossier
Likes: anal sex, giving and receiving blow jobs,  drawing, reading, cooking
Dislikes: bathroom stuff, pain, living on the streets (but has to anyways)
Attitude: Timid and shy
Habit/Twitch: tenses when he thinks he's in danger or going to get hurt
Quote: none
Weapons: none
History:Damian was a bit of a wild child growing up and was always getting in trouble. As he got older he got into extreme sports like skateboarding and motorcross. He bought himself a Harley and modified it when he was old enough to drive. His parents died when he was 16. He has had no family and has been on the streets ever since. He travels from place to place, moving on when things get to hectic for him or when he gets bored of the town. He is new to town and doesn't know anything about what is going on in it. He has no friends here yet and with no family no one is going to be missing him if anything happens to him. He has found an abandoned building that he stays in at night. The only items he has is the ripped and dirty clothes he's wearing and the ten dollars he has in his pocket.

Possible Crimes for Victims
[Yes - No - Attempt]
Robbery: yes
Kidnapping: yes
Assault: yes
Arson: no
Blackmail: yes
Forced Criminal Activity: yes
Rape: yes
Murder: no

« Last Edit: October 22, 2010, 02:13:22 PM by LucianLuna »

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Re: [NC][Hiring] Burden City
« Reply #184 on: October 21, 2010, 07:43:56 PM »
LucianLuna, your character is approved. :)

However, if you could please add just a bit more to the profile, I think it might give us more to go on. Likes and dislikes are not necessarily ons and offs. They can be non-sexual. So if you'd be willing to add some to his personality and such, that might help. Also, do you have a model for him yet? Is it Alexander Skarsgard?

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Re: [NC][Hiring] Burden City
« Reply #185 on: October 21, 2010, 07:47:30 PM »
I'm looking for a pic for him and yes he looks like the guy from true blood.

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Re: [NC][Hiring] Burden City
« Reply #186 on: October 21, 2010, 07:50:59 PM »
I am going to have to step in here and override the approval for the character. I do not feel as if there is heart and soul put into the character. I have seen Lucian around several role plays and he seems to be just a carbon copy that is slightly changed to fit different role plays. That is fine as it seems you love the character, but you haven't convinced me that you love the role play by using a character that is involved in other role plays as well.

You'll have to come up with a new character in order to participate.

I'm sorry but this needs to be done before my approval is given.

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Re: [NC][Hiring] Burden City
« Reply #187 on: October 21, 2010, 07:54:45 PM »
I am going to have to step in here and override the approval for the character. I do not feel as if there is heart and soul put into the character. I have seen Lucian around several role plays and he seems to be just a carbon copy that is slightly changed to fit different role plays. That is fine as it seems you love the character, but you haven't convinced me that you love the role play by using a character that is involved in other role plays as well.

You'll have to come up with a new character in order to participate.

I'm sorry but this needs to be done before my approval is given.

The lady speaks. <3

Sorry Lucian, I'm backing up Lady Reign on this as well.

Offline LucianLuna

Re: [NC][Hiring] Burden City
« Reply #188 on: October 21, 2010, 08:39:12 PM »
ok updated

Offline Christa

Re: [NC][Hiring] Burden City
« Reply #189 on: October 21, 2010, 08:40:29 PM »
ok updated

Please read what Lady Reign wrote and edit accordingly.

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Re: [NC][Hiring] Burden City
« Reply #190 on: October 21, 2010, 09:12:01 PM »
ok done

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Re: [NC][Hiring] Burden City
« Reply #191 on: October 22, 2010, 01:26:24 AM »
Lucian, we need you to be more specific please. That's what the others are asking of you. They do not want one to three word replies to the application.

Give more details and information about your character, especially The Dossier.

That way, the Criminals and Investigators have an idea what to expect of you and how they can cooperate you into their storylines they now have/are having. If you just give us the bare bones of it, no one will know what to do with you if we approve of your character. Please use more than one sentence or one word when answering if you can.

What I want to specifically see from your character application before I give out my approval is the following:

Likes: Both sexual and non-sexual, must be detailed of what your character is/is not willing to do and must also be properly worded (as in not using 'stuff', 'whatever' or etc) when describing things.

Dislikes: Both sexual and non-sexual, must be detailed of what your character is/is not willing to do and must also be properly worded (as in not using 'stuff', 'whatever' or etc) when describing things.

Attitude: Basically, their personality and how they act day to day or how they react to everyday life.

Habit/Twitch: Something identifiable of the person when they are bored/lying/angered/pressured/etc.

History: The detailed background of the person to show how they became the person they are today. How they came to Burden City, why they live there or not, were they ever abused or hurt before? How did they get their job or recognized.

Again, it must be more than just a few words a few sentences. I'm sorry if I seem harsh, I'm simply trying to explain to why I feel like your character is not being approved of the roleplay. If you have a problem with what I have said, please let me know via PM and not here in order to not cause drama.
« Last Edit: October 22, 2010, 01:30:32 AM by AngelsDemonsCode »

Offline LucianLuna

Re: [NC][Hiring] Burden City
« Reply #192 on: October 22, 2010, 03:24:43 AM »
They told me to make a new character because I used Lucian to much so I did. A new character isn't going to have as much info because it was just created and i have planned it out for several months like i did Lucian

Offline LucianLuna

Re: [NC][Hiring] Burden City
« Reply #193 on: October 22, 2010, 03:30:01 AM »
I updated with what i could come up with for a new character just created today

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Re: [NC][Hiring] Burden City
« Reply #194 on: October 22, 2010, 03:45:54 AM »
If your having trouble it might be a good idea to look at the approved bios to get an idea of what is expected, and then just try to fill out your own with as much information and details as possible (like maybe include history from before Damian's parents died)

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Re: [NC][Hiring] Burden City
« Reply #195 on: October 22, 2010, 02:14:28 PM »
ok one more time. More info added to background. Is this ok?

Offline Le Immortelle

Re: [NC][Hiring] Burden City
« Reply #196 on: October 23, 2010, 08:54:19 AM »
Act I. The Profile
Birth Name: Naomi Bell
Name: Naomi Bell, Rachel Price, Dana Smith [Changed depending on situation with enough documentation to support it.]
Alias: The Exterminating Angel
Age: Current - 31, Apparent - 31
Sex: Female
Orientation: Bisexual
Profession: Mercenary
Role: Criminal
Alignment: Neutral

Act II. The Diagnostics
Height: 5'8"
Weight: 130 lbs
Hair: Black, Shoulder length
Eyes: Brown
Skin: Brown, tanned
Birth Mark: None
Tattoos: Rose petals on the back side of her neck
Distinguishable Mark/Scar: None

Act III. The Dossier
Likes: Adventure, Fast Cars, World Music, Motorcycles, Weapons of all kids, Professional clients, Annonymity, Martial Arts, Domination, BDSM, Orgasm Denial.
Dislikes: People who sell her out, Clients who don't come good on money due, Targets escaping, Scat and Watersports.
Attitude: Determined, somewhat brash and overconfident due to her excellent track record. She has no specific loyalties considering anyone can buy her services as long as they can pay the large fees. Unsympathetic towards her targets because it's all about being professional for her.
Habit/Twitch: When bored, she likes to practice with bullets on dartboard in her home.
Quote: "Really, i'm just working on reducing the population of this city hon, don't get so upset that I chose you."

"Never underestimate the predictibility of stupidity."

Weapons: Bor Sniper Rifle in the car, AK-47, Nunchuks, .44 Desert Eagle
History: Naomi was born on the outskirts of Burden City to dad who was known to be a world class assassin. Which also meant that she largely grew up on her own, living with the people her father trusted to take good care of her. She trained in martial arts since young age, and at the age of thirteen was sent to Japan by her father when things got too hot in USA for him, and a hit which was assigned for him led to death of her mother. And some of the Yakuza owed him a favour. There she developed a keen interest in Jujutsu, eventually mastering the art along with developing a liking for guns. She performed her first hit when she was 17 year old and did it rather cleanly. Impressing the Yakuza..as time went on her father allowed her to take over most of his dealings in Asia..and often performing several missions together.

It was in Burden City itself, when she was on American soil after almost 7 years that she witnessed her father get shot in middle of a hit gone wrong as it eventually turned out to be a setup to get both of them. She managed to escape due to her position, which was on a rooftop whilst her father was on the ground level. She could never really find the killers except knowing that it was something which involved both cops and the gangsters. Naomi continued her own work and kept on changing her aliases to throw off the cops and some criminals both chasing her. Criminals chasing her because many felt that a talent like this let loose, whose services were available for purchase by anyone is too dangerous to be roaming around freely. She refuses to leave Burden City simply because it's a criminal heaven..and from this is where her story started.

Offline Lady ReignTopic starter

Re: [NC][Hiring] Burden City
« Reply #197 on: October 23, 2010, 08:58:49 AM »
I am sorry to say LucianLuna, that I cannot approve you for this game. As a the Creator of Burden City, I have to take care of those that have joined my game; their wishes, wants, and needs. I still do not see the right kind of passion for writing and role playing that has been set by all of my current players. I do not think that it would be a good match. However, if you disagree with this, you are more than welcome to appeal this to prove that you would fit well in with the others.

If you wish to do this, you'd be given a writing prompt and then a vote amoung the GMs and myself shall be taken. From there, all four of us will decide if you are approved or not. Let me warn you though, that it will not be an easy prompt. We would be looking for things such as decent grammar, detail, story progression, and character depth. We take this game very seriously, and it is not just a game to "get your rocks off". It has a very complex and diverse story while running several side plots at the same time.

Just let me know of your decision and we will go from there.

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Re: [NC][Hiring] Burden City
« Reply #198 on: October 23, 2010, 09:02:07 AM »
What Lady has said, it's the overall decision for the sake of the game. Apologies Lucian.

And to Amazon, your character has been approved for the game under the conditions that you will not use all your weapons and only have a maximum of two at any given time. You have agreed to these conditions with me before and I hope you see through them. In any case, welcome aboard to Burden City.

Offline heavenleighdahl

Re: [NC][Hiring] Burden City
« Reply #199 on: October 23, 2010, 12:01:31 PM »
Hello all. I heard about this very interesting game from AngelsDemonsCode, and I was instantly transfixed. I hope my profile is right for this story.

Act I. The Profile
Birth Name: Caroline Irene Slattery
Name: Carreen or Officer Slattery
Alias: N/A
Age: 28
Sex: Female
Orientation: Heterosexual
Profession: Officer
Role: Investigator
Alignment: Detective

Act II. The Diagnostics
Height: 5'8"
Weight: 142
Hair: Silver Blonde, shoulder length hair with a slight curl
Eyes: Grey/blue
Skin: Soft Peaches and Cream
Birth Mark: A beauty mark on the inside of her cleavage
Tattoos: All of Carreen's tattoos incorperate her past. One on her calf, that stands about three inches all around is the United States Marine Corps Logo, another is a lower back tattoo that has a bulldog puppy laying on her hip line with "Devil Puppy" written in elegant script, a continuation of her former nickname and a joke on a female in the group of "Devil Dogs".
Distinguishable Mark/Scar: A scar that runs from just under her palm up to the inside of her elbow, suffered from barbed wire.

Act III. The Dossier
Likes: Carreen is a classical movie fan, her favorite being the movie and book that she had been named from, Gone with the Wind. She will admit to reading the book at least twice a year and watching the movie on her off days and nights, when she needs a stress reliever. Otherwise, Carreen is book lover, who will read anything and loves reading case files. She loves animals, but dogs are by far her favorite, the top of all is her bulldog, Hades. Since she has always been the hard willed girl, she enjoys a man taking hold of her hair and telling her what he wants when she is being intimate with one, which doesn't happen often with her job.
Dislikes: Any kind of mistreatment turns Carreen off. She hates the idea of dog fighting, which was the main reason that she ended up joining the force. She doesn't believe people that claim true innocence, knowing the true horrors of the world.
Attitude: Carreen is a stubborn woman with a strong will. She doesn't often show emotion, but she will smile when she's happy or enjoys something. She is a nice person, when around the people she likes, and when she's around people she doesn't like, she is completely indifferent, and sometimes mean.
Habit/Twitch: She will bite the inside of her lip and play with her hair when she's nervous or thoughtful.
Quote: "Get on with it."
Weapons:
~9mm with four clips all the time
~Compact semi-automatic Smith & Wesson .45 ACP Chief's Special
~Two pairs of handcuffs
~A Riot Stick
~Kevlar Vest
~Mace, the neurological kind
~Stun gun

History: Carreen grew up in an Air Force household. Her father was a Lieutenant General, and her mother made it to Staff Sergent before being discharged so that she could take care of her family. Carreen has one older brother, who everyone assumed would join the Air Force when he turned eighteen. Instead he chose to become an interior decorator. Carreen was the child that enjoyed listening to her father's stories of war, and who learned the 'boy things'. She could fix up an entire car by the time she was sixteen, and became her father's joy. At eighteen she decided to join the Military, but chose to join the Marine Corps instead of the Air Force. She rose in the ranks quickly and became one of the boys.
When she reached the rank of Warrant Officer, she fell in love with one of the men in her squad. They had planned to be married, but right after they'd made it official he was sent off to Iraq, where he was killed two weeks in. That was when she decided she needed a change of life, she was a Chief Warrant officer when she was honorably discharged. She has always been the type that would follow instructions no matter what, and thought that being a police officer would be a continuation of her old life, so she didn't even consider it. At least until she came upon a dog fighting ring and saw a bulldog puppy being used to train two dogs on the art of killing. She saved the dog that became her best friend, Hades, and decided that being a police officer was what she should do. So, she went to the academy and became a police officer quickly with her past training.
She's a 'fair is fair' cop, and has the tendency to give a suspect what he or she deserves, but she won't do anything very wrong, and knows whats good or not.