There's nothing in Mind Control specifically, it's that the power has a duration of Concentration (Lasting), which consumes a standard action each turn to maintain or it dissipates. That's the part I was looking to change (by increasing the duration from Concentration to Sustained), maybe by splicing in the similiar line from Illusion (another Concentration power - a static illusion is maintained for free, active or changing ones take concentration)...comparatively, it might take Concentration to change orders given or directly control someone, otherwise they just carry out the last command they were given indefinitely, automaton-style. On the other hand, restrictions are indeed there for a reason - only 6 powers in the entire list have Concentration duration (ESP, Illusion, Mind Control, Mind Reading, Suffocate, and Telepathy). Suffocate would be indescribably broken without the Concentration, ESP and Mind Reading/Telepathy would just be silly and nonsensical. Illusion is the odd one out, since it lets you make ''fire-and-forget' effects, but that's only 1/6 if Mind Control stays locked at Concentration.
I'll just make it an Alternate Power of my Telepathy. Confusion should suffice as my primary combat maneuver instead. If I need a bunch of doods to be mine right then, I can Stunt the Split Targets feat and get up to 6 puppets anyways.
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Here's rewrite number 1, now complete with backstory. Only one request to make, though, the aformentioned vulnerability of his body armor to electrical discharges. The Power Loss Drawback would fit best, but it's vague on details (exposure to Electricity damage, lose all benefits of the Device and suffer a Defense penalty for...1d10 rounds, maybe? ). Would that be enough to qualify for a Minor, Uncommon Drawback (+1 point)?
Info
Name: Paul Clayton
Race: Human
Gender: Male
Ethnicity: Caucasian
Nationality: American
Age: 20
Height: 5'7"
Weight: 190 lbs.
Ability Scores (20 points)
Str 10/+0
Dex 12/+1
Con 12/+1
Int 14/+2
Wis 14/+2
Cha 18/+4
Attack/Defense (12 points)
Attack Bonus: +2
Defense Bonus: +4
Saves (10 points)
Toughness +1
Fortitude +2
Reflex +2
Will +6
Skills (12 points)
Bluff x8, Concentration x8, Diplomacy x8, Gather Information x4, Intimidate x4, Knowledge: Business x4, Knowledge: Technology x4, Sense Motive x8
Feats(1 point)
Attractive 1
Powers (35 points)
Telepathy 6 w/ Comprehend = 13 points
-Alternate Power (Mind Control 6 w/ Subtle) = 1 point
Emotion Control 6 w/ Split Attack = 13 points
-Dynamic Alternate Power (Confuse 1-6) w/ Split Attack = 2 points
-Dynamic Alternate Power (Stun 1-5 w/ Accurate, Range x2, Alternate Save (Will) = 2 points
Nanofibre Bodysuit: Device 1 (Hard to Lose) =4 points
Protection 4 w/ Impervious
Flaw – Electrical Vulnerability (-X points)?
Complications:
Mild Fame; Paul is already fairly well-known by the media for his antics, and so most of the apparatus to detail his new adventures were already in place. He doesn’t make a point of showing off, but still gets the occasional reporter or well-wisher. It hasn’t hurt his luck with the ladies either – if anything, the thrill of dating (or at least sleeping with) an actual superhero has made him even more attractive to many.
Potential Complications:
Ex-Lovers: Most of Paul’s ex-conquests walked away from their liaison both richer and happier. Someone could be holding a grudge though, which he would of course be completely unaware of. And if that someone turned out to develop powers of their own and decide to act on their grudge, things could get hairy for Paul.
Background:
Centuries ago, scientists believed that the universe revolved around the Earth. Nowadays, it is understood that the Earth revolves around the Sun. It would seem, however, that the universe revolved around Paul, at least from his perspective while growing up. The firstborn son and heir of Maxwell Clayton, CEO of Claytech Industries. He wanted for nothing – a father who doted on him whenever business allowed, a mother who cared for him in between innumerable social functions, and a string of excellent nannies and tutors to fill the times in between. As a natural result, he turned out indescribably spoiled, especially once he grew old enough to go out on his own. The young Clayton was the darling of respectable magazines and tabloids alike, spending endless nights and dollars out on the town in the company of one beautiful woman after another – actresses, porn stars, even occasionally normal girls who caught his eye. Privately, Paul believed himself to be God’s ultimate gift to the female half of humanity, expressing this with a long trail of broken hearts (and occasionally hymens).
Recently, though, he started to notice that something was different. While it might have been a paradox to his self-centered mind, his success with women actually seemed to be increasing. He had always been an expert in seduction, but now they seemed to throw themselves at him even before he could work his charm. In bed, he was anticipating what would make his partners happiest without them needing to say it…almost as if he were reading their minds. Never one to turn down experimentation, it didn’t take long for him to determine that it was true – somehow, his natural talents had awoken into full-blown telepathic abilities. He could look into other people’s thoughts, communicate without speaking, and manipulate their feelings or even their actions.
He briefly considered keeping it a secret, continuing his playboy lifestyle as before, but discarded it almost immediately. Something in him hungered for fame beyond what the tabloids provided – and he had superpowers to earn it with! He started looking for things to do with his abilities, things that ‘heroes’ would do. Mind-controlling a man threatening to jump from his 15th-story office window worked well. Intervening in a street mugging by a pair of thugs at night, not so much. That encounter ended with a gunshot wound in his arm, waking him up to the fact that he was still a perfectly ordinary, squishy human being behind his growing mental powers – he could outsmart most criminals, but he couldn’t outsmart a bullet. So, he went to Claytech’s R&D department. With the reluctant blessing of his father, finally happy to see the boy doing something other than embarrassing the family name (even if it meant being a mutant), he ended up with an prototype suit of flexible body armor constructed from computerized nanofibres, capable of resisting or outright deflecting pretty much anything. Its only persistent flaw was a vulnerability to severe electrical discharges, causing the suit to lock stiff as the onboard computers shut down and rebooted. He took it anyways – after all, what were the odds he’d get struck by lightning while being a hero?
