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Author Topic: Interest Check for St. Arcadia Academy (Hentai, based on Discipline series)  (Read 13195 times)

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Offline Haibane

In the end shed rather have sadistic fun than struggle for ultimate power I think so her in the social club would be perfect!
I'm a little concerned about your answers. Fitting such a dominant girl into the game at the level you are planning her to rise to may be a problem, since there's already quite a hierarchy set-up among the students, and its a hierarchy Leona has built, with her #2 assistant being her lover and fiancee with her #3 and #4 being the Nishizaki twins who are both cruel and sensuous. I don't see any new student reaching those dizzy heights but Leona could always make use of another thug. It depends how comfortable you as a player are, Wisdomcube, writing scenes where your character has to submit (Leona may well do this to test her) and have to deal with other girls securely higher up the food chain than her.

Her family is blackmailed of course so the bottom line is she has to do what the Morimotos say. It's highly unlikely we'd invoke that issue in the game - we'd discuss ways to avoid it OOC - and its main function is a background fact that allows the Morimoto sisters to impose their will on anyone, and for the school's secret agenda to proceed unhindered. She will also become a whore for the Morimoto's powerful clients and friends eventually though we won't get to that in the game. However its probable that some of those clients like to submit, so a dominant girl would be an asset to the family.

There's a minor detail in her family background section that I think could use a bit of amending and that is about her father's reaction. He has no idea St Arcadia is nothing at all but an ordinary and very good school and both he and Perusepone have no clue what goes on there and what will happen. The father has been given an offer he can't refuse by Morimoto senior (Reina and Leona's father) and no doubt he's intelligent enough to realise his daughter is being held as collateral for his future loyalty and to ensure he keeps his mouth shut over the incident they "helped him out of". So if you remove the foreknowledge that will help.
« Last Edit: June 09, 2014, 02:15:05 PM by Haibane »

Offline Haibane

I want to play Ryu Maeda instead of Rinji Akitaro. Rinji has too much history and wrapped up into the plot for my liking.
That's fine. Ryu was only involved in a couple of scenes and his personality is much more open for some good solid growth. He is a bit of a rebel though, and despises - or at least ignores - the more formal Japanese social customs such as the spoken honorifics. A real 'modern kid'. He's quite assertive. Be aware the lack of proper social respect will lead to trouble when he encounters Leona (he hasn't yet). Ryu has been in the school for only 1 week. He had sex with Matsuno Kaori, one of his lady teachers on the first day but no more scenes since then.

A) How often do you expect posts?
B) Imdon't have any knowledge of the series (expect for that what has been posted here), is that ok?
C) Would you accept a transfer student from Switzerland? I have zero knowledge abput Japanese culture and i woiuld be more comfortable playing a character with a familiar background. I was thinking that my girls father is a high ranking manager at a Swiss bank. He has a gambling problem and has been adefalcating money to pay for his gambling depts. Unfortunately that money belonged to the Mormitos. They weren't happy when they got wind of it. They forced him to help them wash money and store it safely in Switzerland as payback. It would be very unpleasant (and very expensive) for the Morimotos if he talks to the authorities. To make sure he doesn't talk but also as a payback for the moeny he owns them, they ask for his daughter.
If not, i'd be open for duggestions. :-)
D) the students don't know about the purpose of the school when they arrive?
E) i would play a young straight girl (16) with strong submissive tendencies, still a virgin when she arrives, but craving for love and affection, willing to do anything to get that.
A) Nile has answered this better than I could have.
B) No knowledge of the series or game is required but if you can find at least the opening 2 episodes online that will help; the game's main themes are based around the core of canon that's established at the start of the series.
C) A foreign student is fine but as Nile said, we'd still need to fit her into the setting. It would help if she understood Japanese so the language barrier is explained away. Of course it would in reality be very hard not to have learned Japanese without also picking up a stack of the culture too, but perhaps you could tweak your girl so she is some kind of child prodigy with an extremely talented affinity for learning languages which she does simply as a hobby, the technical aspect of their structure is what she finds interesting maybe. That way she'd be able to be good with the language while perhaps never having bothered to get to learn the culture. That way we can turn your lack of knowledge of Japan into an in-character sub-plot and have some learning go in both for her and for you. I can see some comedy value here as well as some suitable punishments for her being inadvertently rude. How does that sound?
D) For correct reply see Nile's post ;)
E) As Nile said, the virginity would vanish fast and be mostly irrelevant physically, but of course from a personality POV you can still RP an innocent person. I am not sure how to bring in the 'seeking affection' part since the school is just a front for a factory that trains prostitutes. She may well find affection with a fellow student of course, maybe even a (NPC) teacher. Would you as a player be okay for your straight character to be forced into girl-girl sex? Its pretty much a given that this will happen immediately.

I've taken a look at the character sheet and it's mostly good. Your comments about her dress style would only apply at weekends as the school uniform is worn at all other times on-campus (and the students don't leave the campus for obvious reasons). Bigger boobs would be an asset, also big boobs are pretty much a hallmark of hentai-porn and we're trying to style the game in that genre.

On the blackmail details it would be a stronger feature if he'd directly used his banking networks to embezzle money direct from the Morimotos, maybe via some illegal digital methods. That makes the Morimotos far more likely to be harsh on him.

The rest of her CS looks great.

Please take a look at some of the IC threads. The players do tend to write longer posts, which I'd guess are above the average for the site, with quality content being much appreciated. The game's one of the longest running on the site at about 3 1/2 years now and a loyal core of awesome RPers have been with us since the very start. We do take pride in keeping it a 'quality' game, so if you can step up to that bar and even help us inch it up, you'll be very warmly welcomed. We like players to be frequent posters in the OOC thread as well and to become involved in the scene and sub-plot planning that keeps the game fresh and interesting for all the players. It's not a 'turn up and fuck' RP at all and we've had our fair share of players come in for one scene and vanish again, so please try not to be another one of those.

Thanks for your interest!
« Last Edit: June 09, 2014, 02:20:43 PM by Haibane »

Offline Ron Don Volante

I'm a little concerned about your answers. Fitting such a dominant girl into the game at the level you are planning her to rise to may be a problem, since there's already quite a hierarchy set-up among the students, and its a hierarchy Leona has built, with her #2 assistant being her lover and fiancee with her #3 and #4 being the Nishizaki twins who are both cruel and sensuous. I don't see any new student reaching those dizzy heights but Leona could always make use of another thug. It depends how comfortable you as a player are, Wisdomcube, writing scenes where your character has to submit (Leona may well do this to test her) and have to deal with other girls securely higher up the food chain than her.

I am absolutely fine with this. It would be fun to see Perusepone be put in her place now and then. I don't usually play submissive so it'll be a fun change of pace.

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Her family is blackmailed of course so the bottom line is she has to do what the Morimotos say. It's highly unlikely we'd invoke that issue in the game - we'd discuss ways to avoid it OOC - and its main function is a background fact that allows the Morimoto sisters to impose their will on anyone, and for the school's secret agenda to proceed unhindered. She will also become a whore for the Morimoto's powerful clients and friends eventually though we won't get to that in the game. However its probable that some of those clients like to submit, so a dominant girl would be an asset to the family.

If Perusepone is pimped out as a dominatrix I think she'd start enjoying it a bit too much so this is obviously more than okay.

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There's a minor detail in her family background section that I think could use a bit of amending and that is about her father's reaction. He has no idea St Arcadia is nothing at all but an ordinary and very good school and both he and Perusepone have no clue what goes on there and what will happen. The father has been given an offer he can't refuse by Morimoto senior (Reina and Leona's father) and no doubt he's intelligent enough to realise his daughter is being held as collateral for his future loyalty and to ensure he keeps his mouth shut over the incident they "helped him out of". So if you remove the foreknowledge that will help.
Consider it done.

Offline NileGoddessTopic starter

The game's one of the longest running on the site at about 3 1/2 years now and a loyal core of awesome RPers have been with us since the very start.

Jeez, has it really been that long? I feel somewhat old.

Wisdom, if you are good to go with what Haibane and I mentioned, then I think Perusepone will fit in the game.

Go ahead and post her in the Student Directory. This is where we log all characters. I'd also recommend reading the Student Handbook, as that has some game information. And lastly, drop a line in the OOC to talk with other players, and we can see how to go about getting you into the current scene, which is a school costume party. All threads are found in the Big Group Games section.

Zeth, if you want to discuss more about Ryu, we can chat over PM, or the OOC.

Offline Leandra

Thanks!

B) I'll try to look them up, or at least an extended description of the series.
C) Sounds good. I'll submit a revised CS later.
E) Okay, i'll tweak that part a bit. Of course i would be. I considered making her bi, but decided it would be more fun if she is straight.

- Of course, that's the clothing style she prefers when not in school uniform.

- I can write longer posts. I just tend to usually write shorter ones as english is not my native language and longer posts take me longer to write. Posting in the ooc is a given, and i'm actually looking for something longtime.

Thanks for answering my questions.

Okay, here is the revised CS:

Name: Amber de Cruz
Age:16
Position: Student
Sexual Preferences: Heterosexual with strong submissive tendencies. While having some experience with boys, she is still a virgin.
Appearance: Amber has shoulder length straight dark blond hair which goes very well with her violet eyes. She has a warm and friendly smile, and when in the right mood, her eyes sparkle. She is 5.4" tall and only weights 52kg and has C cups. As a sportive girl she has well developed muscles and no ounce fat where no should be. Due the time she spends outside, she has a well-tanned skin. Outside of school, Amber dresses rather casually, she prefers to wear either modest dresses or a knee length skirt with a top/t-shirt. Also she often can be seen in jeans and a hoodie.

Personality: Amber is an intelligent girl, she certainly would have been at the top of her class if not for her laziness. Instead of learning she prefers to hang out, daydream in her room and listen to music. Some of her hobbies are reading, writing, languages, listening to music. Over the years she has learned quite a few languages, among them Japanese. Her interest is more on the technical use than on the cultural aspects that surrounds a language. While she might be able to speak and write Japanese reasonably well, her knowledge about the Japanese culture is practically non-existent. Amber hopes to become a professional writer when she is grown up.  She is a friendly, helpful and good-hearted person, but a bit shy and introvert. If she knows someone better she opens up fast. She loves to laugh and have fun with her friends. Amber is afraid of heights and has a slight spider phobia.

Purpose at Arcadia: Her dad is working in a high position in the asset and wealth management of a well known Swiss private bank. Her dad prefers a luxury lifestyle and also loves to visit the local casino. To finance his life and his casino visits, he begun to embezzle money by illegal means. With his knowledge and his access to the banking network, it isn't that hard to hide suspicious transactions. He picked the accounts of a wealthy Japanese family, thinking that they wouldn't notice the illicit transactions among the many transactions necessary to manage their assets. They weren't happy when they got wind of it. Instead of simply handing over to the authorities and having to fight for reimbursement from his employer they reached a different agreement with him. Her Dad would continue to work for the bank and pay them back their money over time. If he doesn't keep the agreement they will expose him, destroying not only his career, but also his reputation and social status. As further incentive and as part of paying for his debts, they asked for his only daughter - Amber.
« Last Edit: June 09, 2014, 06:13:00 PM by Leandra »

Offline Haibane

Wiki of the game and hentai TV series.

Some YouTube links. No doubt sites like Vimeo etc have more.

If you just ask Google about "Discipline Record of a Crusade downloads" you'll probably come across something useful.


Offline Leandra

Thanks for the links! :)

Offline NileGoddessTopic starter

Hai, anything else, or should we have her post in the character thread?

Offline Haibane

No more comments from me, Amber looks good to go!

Offline NileGoddessTopic starter

Go ahead and post her in the Student Directory. This is where we log all characters. I'd also recommend reading the Student Handbook, as that has some game information. And lastly, drop a line in the OOC to talk with other players, and we can see how to go about getting you into the current scene, which is a school costume party. All threads are found in the Big Group Games section.

Leandra, follow the steps from my previous post.

Offline NileGoddessTopic starter

Sorry for the delay Stendarr. I am hoping to look over your application in the next couple of hours.

Offline Letrixia

Name: Kaoru (if you want to make her a family member of somebody that needs it go right ahead)
Age: 16
Position: Student
Sexual Preferences: Submissive Bisexual
Appearance: Short brown hair, blue clear eyes Kaoru is a girl that looks just like every other girl in the country. Small tattoo of a heart with a angel wing and an devil wing on her lower back. She seems to be always near her headphones set or with them around her neck when she is not hearing music. She is only seen with her glasses when she needs to read otherwise she tries her best to not wear them. She is often wearing short pants and all around comfortable clothing.
Personality: Kaoru is your normal everyday girl, she is introverted so she is always looking for times alone so she could hear music but she is not against having a good time with people she knows and trust. She never had sex instead all of her efforts she focused on her music, she loves music and is always hearing them with big headphones. Kaoru is a nice girl overall that would do anything and keep any secret if she think the secret is worth keeping. However if she thinks the secret is worth for another person to know she is not afraid to do the right thing. To her however a promise is something to keep, she will go to the ends of the earth in order to keep a promise that she made.
Purpose at Arcadia:
She lived a very open life, her parents gave her the time to do anything she wished and trusted her with knowing what was right and wrong. She never disappointed them in part because she never wanted to see them mad at her. She often took music class learning as much as she could of every instrument that she liked. To her music was the only thing that relaxed her and made her calm enough so she could study. Her parents however were not as nice or as good as she might think, they were corrupt couple. While the husband was having an affair with his boss the wife was having an affair with her own boss both of them keeping the secret from each other. While the mother held a modest job and if fired she could survive the father however was part of a multimillionaire company and was in charge of very important work for the government,  if the government knew about this his reputation and career would be over and he would never be able to pick it up.

With that weapon in hand Arcadia put the pieces in motion, they got fired the wife and gave a threat to the father. Either take Kaoru to St. Arcadia to be trained and then sold to them or they would ruin his reputation and put them on the streets. The father knew that he could not do it to Koru so he agreed making her transfer schools as soon as he was ordered to this new place where she knew nobody.

Offline NileGoddessTopic starter

Stendarr, here are my thoughts.

Appearance: Sora is about five foot three with a rather slender build. She has long purple hair that she often does up in some way. She weighs in at about 48 Kg with modest B cups. Because of her hobbies she can handle herself on a physical level.

Per the interest check, characters must be rooted somewhat in reality. She can dye her hair purple, but it cannot be naturally purple. As this is hentai, it would be nice if she was a little 'fuller' with her endowment. Also, please elaborate what you mean by 'handling herself'.

Personality: Sora is an achiever. She enjoys a challenge and will hardly ever turn down a fight. She has a certain opposition to "the system" and prefers doing things her own way, whether it gets her into trouble or not.

This will likely have to be downplayed, as St. Arcadia is viewed as being highly respectable. She would be expected to answer to authority, and since it's a relatively smalls school, she wouldn't have an easy time just blending in. There's nothing wrong with some rule-bending from time to time, but we can't have a character that nulls the school's rules.

For most of her free time she can be found socializing and partaking in adrenaline inducing activities. While she does decently well academically she doesn't often find herself reading, writing or anything terribly slow paced. Others, including herself, would consider her to be a tomboy. While she does occasionally dress in a masculine fashion and often partake in activities geared towards men she is very childish and girly at heart, a girl who can handle herself nonetheless.

What sort of adrenaline-inducing activities are there on a private campus? This makes me think of skydiving, rock-climbing, or skateboarding, none of which fit the setting. The next few lines completely contradict each other: she's okay academically, yet she doesn't do anything actively academic, which seems to suggest she's just smart for the sake of being smart. She's also a tomboy, but very childish and girly, which doesn't fit. It should either be one or the other. And, again, the 'handling herself' needs to be elaborated. This game doesn't involve fighting of any kind, so skills to suggest such are completely irrelevant.

Purpose at Arcadia: Whether it expensive or experimental drugs or the thrill of running heists they soon found them selves in a tight situation. One day the rich Morimoto family offered Sora's family protection for what at first seemed practically free. The family gracefully accepted the offer. It wasn't until soon after that Sora's parents discovered that the high school Sora was to be transferred to was corrupt and over all practically a sexual prison. They were however in no position to argue and decided to go through with Sora's introduction to the school. Sora was never informed of the schools true purposes.

This really won't fit the game. The Morimoto family has no incentive to have anything to do with her family, especially if they are outright criminals of that scale. And they would have no way of knowing what goes on at St. Arcadia. The Morimotos need to have leverage over the family in a way that would completely damage or destroy them legally and financially. I would recommend something white collar and business-related; fraud, embezzlement, etc, perhaps directly with the Morimotos' business (which can be assumed to be a little bit of everything). They are then caught, and the Morimotos offer them a deal, which involves complacency in exchange for their obedience, and child. Sora would not be aware of any of this on any level. To her, this is a transfer to a prestigous school (which she may or may not enjoy).



Letrixia, thank you for the interest too. I will have to hold off on reviewing your character because you are relatively new to Elliquiy. We have had new people join, post once in the OOC, then vanish many times. It makes the game difficult, so I will ask that you check back in a few weeks once you have had more time to explore what you are looking for on E.

Offline Stendarr

Alright, I'll change her up. Most of the problems was actually just me improperly describing things. Expect a post in the next half hour.

Offline Letrixia

I can also create a dominant or take over one in case it's needed.

Offline Stendarr

Name: Sora Tatako
Age: Seventeen
Position: Student
Sexual Preferences: Bisexual (large preference of men), switch/dominant, enjoys being dominant but is very open to pretty much anything.
Appearance: Sora is about five foot three with a rather slender build. She has long purple hair that she often does up in some way. She weighs in at about 48 Kg with modest B cups. Because of her hobbies she can handle herself on a physical level.
Appearance: Sora is about five foot three with a rather slender build. She has long dark hair, which is nearly always dyed purple, that she often does up in some way. She weighs in at about 48 Kg with decent C cups. Because of her hobbies she can hold her own weight, and maybe then some, on a physical level.

Personality: Sora is an achiever. She enjoys a challenge and will hardly ever turn down a fight. She has a certain opposition to "the system" and prefers doing things her own way, she isn't at all daft however and very quickly realizes when she should be more obedient. For most of her free time she can be found socializing and partaking in physically exerting activities. While she does decently well academically she doesn't often find herself reading, writing or anything terribly slow paced. Others, including herself, would consider her to be a tomboy. While she does occasionally dress in a masculine fashion and often partake in activities geared towards men she may show a more giggly side to those she is familiar with, a girl who can handle herself nonetheless. She has many friends though not too many closer ones that she feels she can really deeply rely on. Once she is done with her studies she hopes to be able to become a renown athlete.

Purpose at Arcadia: Sora grew up as an only child in a moderately classed family in Japan. Unfortunately, Sora's mother died at a young age leaving her father, a busy athlete, alone to raise her. By the time Sora had reached about seventeen years of age her father, who was coming into his late thirties, had retired from his job as an athlete and had decided to become a coach for professional swimming team owned by the Morimoto family. Obviously in his new line of work Sora's father was not making nearly as much money as he had been previously and he eventually sought out a way to increase his bank. So almost naturally, as many men had done before he began slowly siphoning money out of the swim team's funds. He was however in no way experienced with this line of work and the Morimoto family were soon aware of the situation; needless to say they were not pleased. Rather than turn the father in the Morimoto family had a different idea. Sora's father would continue to work for the bank and pay them back their money over time. If he were to oppose the family they would turn him into not only the officials but the press as well, causing him not only a major financial loss but a loss of reputation as well. To insure their half of the deal the Morimoto family insisted that Sora would be enrolled at Arcadia. Sora's father was in no position to argue and decided to go through with Sora's introduction to the school. Sora was never informed of the schools true purposes.
« Last Edit: August 31, 2014, 11:09:17 PM by Stendarr »

Offline NileGoddessTopic starter

Please edit the profile, and not repost it. It lengthens the interest check and makes duplicate entries.

Offline Stendarr

Oh sorry, I'll just delete the first then.

Offline Karasu

this seems interesting.. I rather suck at pure hentai and sexual scenes, but I'm on the fence if my typical personality choices for characters fit in here..

Type 1, Submissive type, shy adn introverted, character ususally doesn't talk a lot, and if he/she does talk, then it is with a soft spoken voice.

Type 2, the Badass, outgoing and somewhat dominant. somewhat mysterious, but I don't play this type that often..

Type 3, Twins. Either being opposites to each other, or the similar type of personality to each other.

Offline NileGoddessTopic starter

Stendarr, you keep mentioning some hidden physical capabilities on three separate occasions, which sounds like she's always ready to fight. If that's the case, it's irrelevant to the game, since there is no fighting, and I feel like you might be getting the wrong impression.

Your purpose is also still pretty thin. It sounds like her parents were pickpockets or con artists, and again, there's no reason for the Morimoto family to really blackmail them. They are already running a prestigious private academy, among their other business ventures, so money on the level her parents acquire really doesn't seem to be all that necessary for them. It might be easier to put them in business with the Morimotos (remember, they do a little of everything, so it can be almost any position). They could then try to pull off some discreet crime, like embezzlement, and get caught. Now the Morimotos have the power to not only end their careers, but also take them to court and ruin them financially and put them in prison. Other options are dirty affairs or theft of stock.



Karasu:

Type 1, Submissive type, shy adn introverted, character ususally doesn't talk a lot, and if he/she does talk, then it is with a soft spoken voice.

This type of character has been proven to be very ineffective in this game. As a group game, you are expected to coordinate with other players, both IC and OOC. This kind of character seems more of the type to 'just stand around and wait for someone'. We need players and characters who are willing to go out and interact. Please read the first post of the interest check carefully, as this is explicitly mentioned.

Type 2, the Badass, outgoing and somewhat dominant. somewhat mysterious, but I don't play this type that often..

If you do not play it often, then I would not recommend you devote to a character you are inexperienced with. There is a hierarchy at the school, so dominant, rebellious characters often find themselves at odds because there is already an established order.

Type 3, Twins. Either being opposites to each other, or the similar type of personality to each other.

There are a pair of twins in the game, though they serve as right-hand girls to Leona Morimoto, and are essentially bullies. They are given power, but are very aware of their place and are openly willing to submit to the higher powers in the school. So far, the've been NPCd with a decent amount of success. I'm not sure about turning them into playable characters.

I'd also prefer you to start with one character, until you are shown to stick with the game through thick and thin.

Offline Stendarr

I'm not trying to say she's ready for a fight at all. Maybe I'm not writing it out properly but all I'm trying to say is she's confident and fit.

And yeah, as for the story I am generally pretty terrible at these, but I think I got an idea. It seems slightly generic but whatever.

EDIT: There, changes made. I hope it suffices this time around.
« Last Edit: August 31, 2014, 11:10:20 PM by Stendarr »

Offline NileGoddessTopic starter

Re: Interest Check for St. Arcadia Academy (Hentai, based on Discipline series)
« Reply #171 on: September 02, 2014, 04:45:50 PM »
Looking over the profile again, I'll have to decline. It just doesn't seem like it would be a good fit for the game. Thank you for the interest.

Offline Stendarr

Re: Interest Check for St. Arcadia Academy (Hentai, based on Discipline series)
« Reply #172 on: September 02, 2014, 10:59:35 PM »
Ow, harsh. Could someone let me know how to take this thing out of my unread replies then?

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Re: Interest Check for St. Arcadia Academy (Hentai, based on Discipline series)
« Reply #173 on: September 02, 2014, 11:14:47 PM »
Ow, harsh. Could someone let me know how to take this thing out of my unread replies then?
Unfortunately, you cannot.  Once you post in a thread, it will appear in your unread replies.

Offline Letrixia

Re: Interest Check for St. Arcadia Academy (Hentai, based on Discipline series)
« Reply #174 on: September 20, 2014, 05:26:53 PM »
aaand my profile got ignored. Looks like I am not too good for this rp either.