Well, I can post the description of my original, and you can see what you think.
Game Title: New kid at the Xavier Institute for Gifted Children.
Game Position: Just another ordinary teenage boy. Or so he wishes.
Full Name: Adrick Domine
Fame: Perhaps the most insecure being in the universe. And he has super powers.
Apparent Age: 17
Theme Song: "Goodbye, Blue Monday." the Feverfew
Quote: "Well, I can't say for sure, but I'm probably better off now, than how I was. At least, I think so . . ."
Temperament: Painfully shy, a bit withdrawn, and very quick to blame himself. Though, in his defense, it's rare you'd find someone sweeter.
Power: Unpenetrable Invisible Armor. Mild Telekenisis.
A slight figure, seeming to be hardly distinguishable from any other teenager. He seems to blend well with whatever his surrounding are, more than content to move through with his head bowed and his feet shuffling. His frame is lithe, seemingly in the awkward transitional phase of youth, making his movement clumsy. He is wiry, made thin by years of lacking proper nutrition, though he manages to maintain enough puppy fat to make himself look, for lack of a better word, 'whole.' He is short for his age, standing at around 5'3. Honestly though, his size suits his demeanor. Whether walking in the streets, or through the halls of the school, he will usually keep his green eyes locked firmly on the ground, making it a point to meet eyes with no one. He keeps his shoulders slumped, almost slouching. He is clothed in a white polo shirt and a pair of worn khakis. Though he would prefer to stay out of the public eye, he obviously takes much pride in his appearance, and manages to look neat and tidy whenever possible. If one were to get him naked, the beauty that lay beneath his disheveled exterior would be almost surprising. His pale skin, hairless and soft, coupled with his light blond hair gives him an almost ethereal appearance. His puppy fat is more evident in this state, protecting him from what would surely be a skeletal appearance otherwise.