Well, let me start with what someone once told me ... Art is about personal reflection. I read your work, and it makes me feel or think something. That personal experiance is really what art is all about. It's also important to note that what you intend is not always what comes across.
That said, the person in question was talking about painting, but I think the idea holds true to all forms of art... including writing.
That said, I can say that it was a little bit on the depressing side ... the story conjured images of someone who clearly cares deeply about another person, yet the feelings are not returned.
I did enjoy reading it, despite the fact that I normally don't enjoy things that talk about suicide and death. So on that note alone, I'd say it's "good", at least from my point of view. I certainly would encourage you to write me, the fact that you decided to share this tells me that you enjoy it.