Author Topic: Naruto. Intelligent and in-depth. Hear me out. (Read 17986 times)

jobe352 · « **Reply #75 on:** June 01, 2011, 09:00:45 PM »

Here's my profile::
It's bare now, but I'll be editing it...
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Name: Yama, "Mai"~((Chihiro Chi Ga Ketsujo Shite Iru))
--Her name, literally meaning "A thousand fathoms lacking blood", was shortened into something more pleasant for the tongue. Yama became the name everyone used, which grew into a joke, for this title ("The Mountain"/"Mountain") really didn't suit the petite child. Those who know Yama best might affectionately refer to her using parts of her original namesake.
Appearance:

Spoiler: Click to Show/Hide

Main strength:(Does your character specialise in Genjutsu, elemental attacks, have blistering Taijutsu, rely on his/her bloodline, etc. Bear in mind you will be starting off as chunin, so you won't be overly powerful at all. This is, rather, an area that your character is definitely showing promise in. Of course, your character could be a multi-tasker and not strong in anything, in order to remain averagely skilled in lots of areas.)

Bloodline/Clan: None

Biography: Life wasn't terrible, not in the least bit...Chihiro's origins are hazy at best, though some things are known about the graceful shinobi. Poor peasants gave birth to a lovely baby girl some years ago, so they say. Feeling that maybe she'd have a better life in another person's hands, the two eventually placed their daughter into the care of a retired Jounin, Haku. He renamed the little girl after the mountains he traveled throughout his career--which was cut short by a debilitating injury. She aided him with daily tasks: cleaning, cooking, and, once in a while, he'd show the adopted child the proper methods of jutsu.

The "Village Hidden In Rain", Amegakure, prove a good home, providing enough seclusion for mediation, yet the presence of skilled warriors also enhanced the chance to learn. Indeed, the dark atmosphere of the town couldn't be such a nice place for raising a child; either way, when Haku passed on, little Yama grew up fast, suddenly immersed in the violence of the de facto government. Somehow, someway, the female progressed, quite quickly, to hold the position of Messenjā (Messenger) for the infamous leader, Nagato. Here is where information loses creditability. Rumors spread that the girl was kin to Pain, that this was his offspring, product of eloping with a woman from the Land of Fire. All those ridiculous fallacies needed closure, so, as resolution, she set off to become the strongest genin possible.

It didn't take long for the anticipated ascension into Chuunin...the E-rank, D-rank, and even C-rack missions were rather boring, consisting of finding the occasional missing person, sweeping floors, and the like. The now Jounin Yama, though few challenging missions under her belt, has the potential to continue to rise in the echelons.

Personality: Quiet. Taciturn, almost. Nights of sheer loneliness left the shinobi hardened--a tough shell surround the delicate emotions lingering inside.

Strengths:
1. Possible talent--Rinnegan. ((Eyes will show signs of the Rinnegan "swirl" pattern when confronted by a powerful adversary. Hasn't been mastered yet...))
2.

Flaws:
1. Average physical strength and speed.

More to come!

SomeGuy · « **Reply #76 on:** June 02, 2011, 01:08:02 AM »

Quote from: jobe352 on June 01, 2011, 09:00:45 PM

Strengths:
1. Possible talent--Rinnegan. ((Eyes will show signs of the Rinnegan "swirl" pattern when confronted by a powerful adversary. Hasn't been mastered yet...))

We're keeping it to Konoha only bloodlines for now, plus the Rinnegan is fairly ridiculous.

I would have gone for it myself if it wasn't so overwhelmingly powerful, Shinra Tensei is my favorite jutsu by a wide margin.

Edit: Of course the Sharingan seems to be rapidly approaching that level, if it hasn't already reached it or passed it. That has very distinct levels, and for the higher levels requirements too. (Semi-related: Susanoo happens to be my second favorite jutsu)

On the more practical side, the setting is an alternate reality so Nagato doesn't exist.

CrazyIvan · « **Reply #77 on:** June 02, 2011, 01:19:37 AM »

Quote from: jobe352 on June 01, 2011, 09:00:45 PM

Flaws:
1. Average physical strength and speed.

nothing against you but this made me laugh slightly, don't quite know why, but some how I found it funny that being average was a flaw.

Also I do agree with SomeGuy in regards to the Rinnegan.

jobe352 · « **Reply #78 on:** June 02, 2011, 05:23:46 AM »

Crazy--

I laughed with you. But, hey! I figured loads of people would say, "My character is, like, supaaaa fast!?" So...yeah.

SomeGuy--

Actually, this was supposed to be a secret, but I think I might have to explain. As far as the Rinnegan goes, Yama doesn't have it. You might think that was a little...dumb, right? It's just more of an intimidation factor--if you will, a defense mechanism. When someone sees her eyes go all crazy, they might freak out.

And I never said she was of Pain's bloodline. She has no heritage, for no one knows where she really came from...

Does that clear some things up?

Edit:: I only used Pain's name to let people know that she was, while growing up, thrown into a vicious, evil setting and employed under one of the most wild and weird characters ever. If this is a problem, I'll change it right up.

Scribbles · « **Reply #79 on:** June 02, 2011, 05:39:24 AM »

Quote from: jobe352 on June 02, 2011, 05:23:46 AM

Actually, this was supposed to be a secret, but I think I might have to explain. As far as the Rinnegan goes, Yama doesn't have it. You might think that was a little...dumb, right? It's just more of an intimidation factor--if you will, a defense mechanism. When someone sees her eyes go all crazy, they might freak out.

I so want Kaya to fight Yama now just so I can have her go, "Oh f***, Rinnegan!"

Ramael · « **Reply #80 on:** June 02, 2011, 05:49:36 AM »

Yeah...

...so your characters abilities lie in mimicking the eye-colour of the Rinnegan?

And...you're from village hidden in the Rain?

And...You worked for Nagato and Pein?

....are you sure you've read/thought this through?

Sorry to be blunt, but I'm getting loads of applications through here and PMs as well where it's clear that someone simply hasn't read this thread at all, and doesn't have any intention of regarding the RP's intent.

If you still want to make a character for this RP, please read this thread through.

This goes for all potential lurkers and people who have applied and been told to re-think some things. Please, please, please read this thread.

Alternate universe. NO canon characters.

Konoha bloodlines. NO crystal jutsu, Rinnegan, any other OP trash that is limited to Kage-level characters in the anime/manga, and actually comes from outside Konoha (even if the Rinnegan did originate inside Konoha, do you really think it's fair for one character to have that in this RP?!)

We're starting at chunin level, which most people seem to be forgetting.

I'm sorry to be blunt about this, but people seem to be dead-set on making a "vessel for an ability" first, rather than a character.

I.E, people just want to type up flashy lights and ninja magic as opposed to thinking about the character and personality first, as I have stipulated, time and again.

I'm not stopping any new recruits, because there has been a surge in new applicants, and I want to get you involved in the game and have even created a place for the newbies to go to, but I'm just asking people to put in a tiiiiiny bit of reading time first, to show you actually care about the RP, as any normal writer would if they wanted to be involved in an RP.

jobe352 · « **Reply #81 on:** June 02, 2011, 02:07:02 PM »

I actually wasn't done with my profile, but I'm dropping out.

Ramael · « **Reply #82 on:** June 02, 2011, 02:23:58 PM »

That's a shame, but I had stipulated these and several other basics throughout this thread for all to see and read. You had the same options open to you as everyone else.

Fightingfaithless · « **Reply #83 on:** June 02, 2011, 03:52:40 PM »

I would love to join though I did have a question about the clans. Since it is an AU thread I thought it MIGHT be okay but I certainly didn't want to take any chances so here it is.

I was wondering if it would be alright if my character was from the Umino clan, the problem is they are not exactly a big clan, since in the Naruto verse they were whipped out. They also do not have any special traits so I didn't want to step on any toes with considering them a clan. I do not wish to make up any special traits so we are all okay there I was just checking if I could consider it a clan or not?

Also, if it is alright to make the name a clan, could have a family member alive despite the fact that the Umino clan was only one strong in the Naruto world.

Oh and on a side note if its not nosy could you give me the count you have on Male characters to Female characters you have approved? I like my character either or but I do not want to flood your game with Females or Males. Want to keep it balanced for ya, that is if applications are still open of course

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Ramael · « **Reply #84 on:** June 02, 2011, 05:52:17 PM »

Of course!

And I can tell you we have more male characters than female characters at present, I'd say a roughly 60/40 percent split in favour of the boys.

Just to get this straight, then...it's just the name itself you're looking for? Being as they don't have a particular bloodline power at all, and they only number one in the actual canon?

You can sure take the name, as long as your character isn't a complete Iruka clone

What did you have in mind?

Fightingfaithless · « **Reply #85 on:** June 02, 2011, 06:18:58 PM »

Oh no I do not need bloodline trait and don't plan on making one up. That was the reason I chose Umino I wanted a clan name, kind of something familiar but without getting to complicated with bloodlines and the like. Well since you have said that I will more than likely make my character female, as far as an Iruka Clone I don't believe mine will be, at least I hope not.

I saw one living relative, I was going to stick with most dieing off since there isn't much known about the clan, I was looking toward it being her Grandmother or Grandfather, most likely going to be a bit on the crazy side.

As for as my character goes as far as skill. I saw someone that was average for a ninja in physically strength but very flexible and agile. I am at a tie between weapons expert or trap expert...not to sure yet.

Ramael · « **Reply #86 on:** June 02, 2011, 06:25:20 PM »

All well and good, and look forward to seeing your character.

One thing...if you only saw one living relative, how are you going to explain it being a grandmother/father? There's a lot of deaths in between, and hard to explain without making it an Uchiha-esque massacre. I'm just curious here.

Fightingfaithless · « **Reply #87 on:** June 02, 2011, 06:42:07 PM »

Oh no defiantly no massacre will occur, I don't see that being possible to a clan with no blood limit.

I will most likely make it one of those things where it was just one big stroke of bad luck. I figure the Umino clan is not very big in the first place.

A bulk of the grandparent's siblings dieing in the Samurai War without children to carry on. The rest dieing in the line of duty or some other vague reason without children, leaving my character's Grandparents, who only had my character's father.

One of the Grandparents die either in the line of duty or something more civilian like a sickness they caught. The parents will both die in the Great Ninja war leaving just my character and the grandparent. No records just bad luck really that the clan just died out.

SomeGuy · « **Reply #88 on:** June 02, 2011, 06:47:22 PM »

With a small clan it wouldn't be to hard for them to get mostly wiped out all at once.

During the wars and stuff poisoning and/or killing them off would be a lot easier then the larger clans who also have bloodlines and whoever it would have been can still say "we/I wiped out one of Konohas clans" which would be an excellent propaganda piece.

Fightingfaithless · « **Reply #89 on:** June 02, 2011, 07:24:40 PM »

lol Yeah I figured that would be the case, I am glad to hear it from someone else as well.

Fightingfaithless · « **Reply #90 on:** June 02, 2011, 08:10:44 PM »

Name: Jun Unimo

Appearance:

Younger

Older

Main Strength: Jun excels in weaponry, she loves any and all weapons from the normal to the strange, new and old, especially strange and old.

Bloodline/Clan: Unimo

Bio: Jun is from the dead Unimo clan, being a female from the line she will either die with the name or it will be removed though marriage. The Unimo clan was always a small clan, with no note worthy history or background or blood limits to speak of. As sometimes life goes along the many years thought death’s with no bared children to pass on the name the clan became smaller and smaller till it meet its down fall with the death of Jun’s parents and no male to take on the name. With the death of her parents the only three left had been her grandparents who had out lived their son, and herself. Not even a year after the death of her parents her Grandmother passed away from a lung infection that no one even knew she had. Leaving Jun with her Grandfather, a nice outgoing man that most found to be a bit on the crazy side. The academy just seemed logical, her clan had always been ninjas, being that of no special blood limit or trait they had always been open to a variety of different fighting styles and strengths, most acquired on their own by what they preferred since most would died without heirs. Jun found the academy to be exciting enough, and some relief from her crazy grandfather’s lectures. She had been a student, just like all her ancestors she made average grades and became a average ninja. That didn’t exactly make her happy, there had only be a few great Ninja’s in her clan and even they were not so note worthy. When she had passed the Chunin exams she promised herself she would push harder, and be better. She didn’t want to be classified as an average ninja, she wanted her clan to go out with a bang.

Personality: Jun has lived most of her life with a rather old insane man, who she sometimes has to take care of doing odd jobs that no one should have to endure, such as giving her grandfather a bath, or chewing his food which makes her on edge some days. No matter how long she has been taking care of him however, her rather impatient personality often has them conflicting over a lot of odd things. Jun is not what you call very happy person. Not that she is a cold or emotionless person by any means, Jun does smile, laugh, and do other things along those lines. She is more on the cynical side of life and often upsets people with her constant negativity or sarcastic comments about anything positive.

Strength and Flaws: She is slightly behind in physical strength, always just getting by with the bare minimums of what she needed to pass. A strength is her insane flexibility, she enjoyed the time she spent learning and training her body to be flexible so she excelled at it. She is rather impulsive which gets her into a lot of trouble most of the time. Her negative attitude can get childish at points, and makes her look like she would sell someone out for a bowl of ramen but in the end she is a loyal when push comes to shove.

Aiden · « **Reply #91 on:** June 03, 2011, 01:24:34 AM »

Posting interest, will post up a sheet and read over everything else besides the main post later.

Edited since I got a sheet up, wanted to make sure the concept was approved before investing time into the bio and personality since I am using the established story with the samurai wars and I was not sure if you did not want this information to be used.

few notes-

The Heishiro clan will be fully loyal to Konoha (not tossing any curveballs)
The panda summoning is utility mostly, the pandas all serve as training aids and help in battle from time to time.
Master Shinjo - Ally to the Heishiro clan in times of need.

Aiden · « **Reply #92 on:** June 03, 2011, 03:51:38 AM »

Name: Heishiro Kyoshiro
Appearance:

Jonin and future

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Main strength:Kenjutsu, Taijustu

Bloodline/Clan: None

Bio: Heishiro family- The Heishiro family is misunderstood in the village because of its origins. Ryuosuke Heishiro was a prisoner of war in the times of the great samurai wars thought to be a spy. Ryu was a master swordsmen but was "dishonored" after he turned his back on his clan, one that made up a large active force during the wars. The Hokage kept the man as a prisoner, watched by Anbu until the war ended. Most of his clan was killed during the wars, those not killed where rumored to have scattered. Left with nothing, he asked the Hokage to allow him to begin life anew in the village and after much hesitation he was. The man never picked up a sword again, turning to a life of honest work as a farmer for the village. He settled down and married, having four sons and two daughters.

With Heishiro as the patriarch of the family, most turned to a life of farming or skilled trades. One of the sons (Heishiro Jun) showed exceptional ability for the sword and he went off to the academy and later became a taijutsu instructor. His son Kyoshiro, like his father, excelled at swordsmanship but lacked severely in genjutsu and ninjutsu (besides the basics)

Personality: Kyo is a inexplicably happy guy who always has a smile on his face, at first glance one would never believe that he is a a budding disciplined swordsmen. He tends to dress in Kendo training clothes which might look a little weird to others since it might be considered "old fashioned". In times of missions he wears a chest piece and plated waist, his headband remains across his forehead, but the Konoha leaf is pressed into the center of his armor.

Kyo is kept busy by his grandpa and always seen delivering sacks of rice or other of their farm's goods (by hand) to the various shops, inns and families who order them. His smile is one of the reasons he is a runner for them, he seems like a social butterfly but he does not like when people mention his grandfather and family in a negative light. He is aware of the burden he carries with his family name and once he learns of his grandfather's dishonor he might try to help the old man reclaim his former honor before he passes away.

Around girls he tends to be a bit awkward and does not take compliments well, he is used to harsh criticism (Mostly due to his training) so when people are nice to him he is not really sure how to properly react. Whenever he feels uncomfortable he flashes a wide grin to hide how nervous he can really be. In combat he seems to take a 180, a battle inspired bi-polar syndrome. His eyes narrow and his determination splays across his face to do the best he can, swapping between the two normally ends in comedic results.

Strengths and flaws:
Strengths-
Kenjustu- Kyo is adapt at the use of the sword and focusing his chakra into it in order to make it stronger, faster and eventually emit it off it in a wave.
Taijutsu- Taijustu- is the foundation to Kyo's mastery over the blade and constant training with and without his blade has left him swift, strong and a high amount of stamina.
Summoning- (Moving this to discover this IC)

Weakness-
Genjustu- Is unable to perform this skill but is learning at breaking it through rigorous taijutsu training.
Ninjutsu- With both hands on the blade, Ninjutsu is another weakness he must learn to adapt without.

Ramael · « **Reply #93 on:** June 03, 2011, 10:19:20 AM »

Hi Aiden. Please read the thread with regards to clans/bloodlines. We're only dealing with such families from inside Konoha, those that are mentioned in the canon.

If you want the name Heishiro, that's fine, but there can't be any special abilities or bloodline traits that come with it. I like that you've tried to embed your familiy in this alternate universe's history, and if you want to keep it that's fine, just make sure there isn't any familiy/inherited abilites that could be similar to a bloodline?

As you'll note from the thread, I have told this and similar things to many other players. Cheers.

Aiden · « **Reply #94 on:** June 03, 2011, 11:18:06 AM »

Changed the information around added a bio and the Heishiro name became family/bio (removed the family traits to make sure it did not bleed over into clan or blood line traits)

I took away the panda oath with the Heisjiro family and would like to move that as an individual skill, starting with Pun, once an instructor teaches him summoning jutsu.

Any more changes I should make, let me know, really like the idea of this game.

Ramael · « **Reply #95 on:** June 03, 2011, 12:17:42 PM »

Good idea, well contained and cleared up. One last thing! Your character will be a fully-fledged genin, ABOUT to take his chunin exams with the rest.

He's ready to go in the character thread unless any of my faithful minions have anything to say about Kyoshiro?

Sorry FightingFaithless, I should've replied to you in my last post as well. Your character is fine also, I'd be interested to see how much the flexibility side comes into the RP. Both of you please go ahead and once you've posted in the character thread, write up your characters entry into the Hallowed Forest Examination Area.

Katra Alexion · « **Reply #96 on:** June 03, 2011, 12:41:05 PM »

I will be posting my characters tonight when I get back from the movies Ramael - sorry for the wait.

Fightingfaithless · « **Reply #97 on:** June 03, 2011, 12:46:19 PM »

Thank you! I guess we will see, it always depends on how people react to it for it to make a difference of course.

Aiden · « **Reply #98 on:** June 03, 2011, 05:08:02 PM »

Will do, thanks. Going to read the IC and work up an intro asap.

Yorubi · « **Reply #99 on:** June 03, 2011, 08:44:54 PM »

Seems you got plenty and all but I'll keep peeking and looking. Since it was mentioned, the Rinnegan is kind of interesting, though the biggest thing about Pein I liked was how he had several bodies all working together. Something about that just made him bad ass as a villain. Sure he had that one powerful version, but I found the dymanics of one individual split into several unique bodies being interesting, and not just some shadow clone jutsu.

Actually *blinks* I think the one thing I absolutely adore in naruto are the villains. They are just so awesome and menacing that it just makes it that much more awesome they are fought against. :) Heck, maybe thats what I should do. Just scope out and watch over the thread and if the GM needs me to step up as a villain, I could do so.