Fantasy RP interest check and character templates

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Smaug

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Name: Danny  McConnale

Gender: Male

Race:Half Human- Half Orc

Age:203

Sexual Orientation: Gay

Human

Bio: When Danny was born he was left in the rain and made to fend for himself. Left and abandoned a human family was nice enough to bring him up, until he killed them when he got to age seventeen. Around that time he got in a lot of trouble with being a prostitute and being what he was. Though he didn't know he was a half orc at first until he was pushed too far into anger and he snapped, turning into his other form. Appalled by this he tried to take jobs that distracted him and worked on controlling the other half of him. He developed a shell which was a happy laid back nice guy, of course pushed too far he becomes angry and rude. He is very bipolar you could say. Doing many jobs he just stuck with being a bounty hunter and a spy to whom ever paid him the most.

Personality: Danny is some what laid back. He has a 'cool' like attitude. Rude and pissed at times he is a good guy to get to know as said above. He also snaps when pushed too far in certian situations or at certian times, changing into the rude orc he is familiar with. Despite his race mix he is very smart, good at deceiving, and he is very neutral, 'who ever pays the most money' is his loyalty, unless there is a man who has caught his interest.

Skills:
Lock Picking: Self explained...
Strength: He has exceptional strength when he is in human form, while he is an orc he is the same.
Primal: In tuned with most of all of them (not good but still), with the exception of doing good with electricity.
He excels in hand to hand combat along with a sword.

Is that better? -n-
Muse(s) mood: Good
Would love: Roleplays
Ons, Offs, Plot Ideas

Normally does M/M very rarely does F/F or M/F

Xanthaine

Perhaps tone down the magic a bit, remember you can specialise in one, but only receive basic skills in the others. He seems well rounded on initial glance, but if you look he has 'Exceptional/extreme strength in both forms' and 'Excels in hand to hand, sword and bow'. Maybe I'm reading it wrong, but he seems a bit... TOO powerful. Also, minor thing, half breeds generally have increased longevity, but an average human/orc lifespan would be in the region of 240. It's good, just needs a few tweaks. :3

I know I sound like a fascist. :-P Perfectionism is a curse. hehe.

Smaug

Muse(s) mood: Good
Would love: Roleplays
Ons, Offs, Plot Ideas

Normally does M/M very rarely does F/F or M/F

Xanthaine

Indeedy. I'm also about to edit my char template with skills too. :3

Prince Truhan


Xanthaine

Perhaps lose one combat skill, or at least lower it... For example in mine, her melee abilities are handy, but makes her far weaker than if she kept out of range with her bow, and most of her skills are non combat based, though useful (scavenging/tracking).

I would suggest lowering his bow expertise a bit, OR make him berserker like in melee, where his defense and self preservation is lowered.

As it stands he's a bit of a tower of power, able to use a bow with excellence as well as melee, meaning in a ranged fight he has no handicap, as well as having none in melee. Your mitigating factors don't have to necessarily completely weaken your character, just allow his enemies a chance.

Izzy is at her strongest in ranged combat against other rangers/melee, at middling in melee, though against expert close combat advocates she would stand a lower chance, her biggest weakness is versus spellcasters at any point, with her bow or in melee, as she has little defense against them, and they have plenty of defense (if they have the reflexes :-P) against any of her abilities.

That's the best system, give them an advantage, a neutral area and a disadvantage. A thing they excel against, something they do okay with and something that has a high chance of mincing them.

MzHyde

The Half-Orc dude's profile has lots of errors in it and it doesn't flow very well. You make it sound like he's a nice guy (or trying to be) and yet he's rude, doesn't hesitate to do 'dirty' jobs, murders people and uses their bones to decorate his weapons... and yet he's still a hit with the ladies? (or the dudes, I guess). Plus, like Xan said, he is WAY too powerful. He can pick locks, use magic, and fight at any range. That's a bit much. You should pick an area and go with that. Look at my character, for instance. Alchemy is a totally overpowered skill. You can do just about anything with it. But to counter-balance that, she needs expensive reagents and preparation time to make these potions. Plus, she has almost no real combat skill. Aside from stabbing someone with a knife tipped with poison, she's got no martial prowess. Also, why two pictures? I don't think Half-Orcism (or whatever you call it) is a transformation like becoming The Incredible Hulk.

SargentToughie

After keeping my ear to the ground a little bit, I'm starting to understand what is and isn't balanced in this RP better. For instance, Aiden would be strongest when fighting at close range, decent at magic combat and mid-range due to his fireballs, but absolute garbage to those who can keep their distance from him, since the farther that the fireballs have to travel, the more predictable and weaker then they become. Back during character construction I was actually thinking about making one of his trinkets a gap closer instead of a shield to compensate for this, but I figured that would be a little far across the line.

Learning is fun.
If you're reading my RPs from the outside and like my writing, feel free to drop me a line! I'm always looking for new, fun partners. :D
Ons and offs

Xanthaine

I have a seriously OCD attitude to balance, it's a theme in SO many of my RP's, anyone who follows me will know this by now. :3 Hell, just check my profile thing to the left. 'Goddess of the Balance' :3

SargentToughie

If you're reading my RPs from the outside and like my writing, feel free to drop me a line! I'm always looking for new, fun partners. :D
Ons and offs

Smaug

Is that better? I like suggestions but damn...>.>  ;D
Muse(s) mood: Good
Would love: Roleplays
Ons, Offs, Plot Ideas

Normally does M/M very rarely does F/F or M/F

CheshireCat

I have been reading through all of this and am quite interested in it. I like how each charactor is balanced and will have to keep this in mind while creating a profile for my own, as I have one in mind.  :-)
"We've done the impossible and that makes us mighty."

"If you take sexual advatange of that girl, you're going to burn in a very special level of hell. A level reserved for child molestors and people who talk at the theater."

AdrianZef

So the opening post says that Shadow Elf is not allowed as a character race. Is this still true?
Don't know if you want to roleplay with me? The answer is yes, you do. But fine, I guess I'll give you one of these: Ons and Offs, as well as a Wishlist.

AdrianZef

Ya know what? Never mind, I'm not going to make my character one of those anyway.
Don't know if you want to roleplay with me? The answer is yes, you do. But fine, I guess I'll give you one of these: Ons and Offs, as well as a Wishlist.

Xanthaine

Yes Shadow Elves are availabl-... Hmph! Nevermind, W wasn't going to invite you anyway! *Snobby nose up face.*

Is joke, the evil races are fine to play, so long as you understand I'll be playing your backstory like a guitar to ensure balance and workability. :3

And yes, Keda, I know I'm a massive OCD fascist :D But my OCD often works well for storylines, epic set pieces and... my personal favourite... I can give you lovely rewards for exceptional roleplay. :3 Nothing to overbalance or overpower, but nice things. :3

Xanthaine

Okay, hoping to roll this out sunday evening (GMT) when I have my own computer back and I'm not surrounded by drunken family members, so watch this space! :3

SargentToughie

If you're reading my RPs from the outside and like my writing, feel free to drop me a line! I'm always looking for new, fun partners. :D
Ons and offs

Xanthaine

Okay, I just got back, but I'm almost passed out atm, and have work in the morning, so expect a start post some time tomorrow evening.

Smaug

I can't wait either! And thank you, how will I be rewarded? By some other gay man who is falling for me?! Lawls and like I said, I can't wait! How will the..I just answered my own q. I forgot where I start,then I remembered! Anyway...
Muse(s) mood: Good
Would love: Roleplays
Ons, Offs, Plot Ideas

Normally does M/M very rarely does F/F or M/F

Xanthaine