Author Topic: Virtually Irresistible Real Life Lounge (OOC) (Read 48589 times)

Sarena · « **Reply #1250 on:** November 08, 2012, 08:48:52 PM »

Oh KingBear, I may be one of the few that understand your love for duct tape. I am quite fond of the little vixen myself.

KingBear · « **Reply #1251 on:** November 08, 2012, 08:50:03 PM »

*gives Sarena a roll of duct tape* We can share her. She is awesome enough for both of us. *smiles and nods*

Remiel · « **Reply #1252 on:** November 08, 2012, 08:55:57 PM »

Quote from: Trieste on November 08, 2012, 08:45:53 PM

Speaking of - wonder if Remiel and JM have planned their honeymoon yet?

Not yet, but I can say pretty confidently that when we do, it's going to be extremely geeky.

Trieste · « **Reply #1253 on:** November 08, 2012, 08:57:17 PM »

Quote from: Remiel on November 08, 2012, 08:55:57 PM

Not yet, but I can say pretty confidently that when we do, it's going to be extremely geeky.

Surprise him with Hack in the Box. I have it on good authority he wants to go.

This post is three pages in Word and I don't know where else I can pare it down. Come on, muse.

Peripherie · « **Reply #1254 on:** November 08, 2012, 09:01:31 PM »

Ugh, thats the hardest part Trie!

As my AP English teacher used to say, "Be pithy! Pith all over the page."

Sarena · « **Reply #1255 on:** November 08, 2012, 09:03:06 PM »

Quote from: KingBear on November 08, 2012, 08:50:03 PM

*gives Sarena a roll of duct tape* We can share her. She is awesome enough for both of us. *smiles and nods*

*fondles roll and grins* Why thank you. *winks*

Trieste · « **Reply #1256 on:** November 08, 2012, 09:03:52 PM »

Quote from: Peripherie on November 08, 2012, 09:01:31 PM

Ugh, thats the hardest part Trie!

As my AP English teacher used to say, "Be pithy! Pith all over the page."

Trying so hard!

Kythia · « **Reply #1257 on:** November 08, 2012, 09:15:05 PM »

Adjectives. Get rid of every single adjective. If its still too long lose the adverbs.

Luna · « **Reply #1258 on:** November 08, 2012, 09:21:33 PM »

Thats funny, a friend was actually talking to me today about what he calls 'adverbitis', where people have a tendency to describe an action, then describe something about the description... and then looking back at my writing, I realize I do that all the time, heh.

Kythia · « **Reply #1259 on:** November 08, 2012, 09:23:39 PM »

Not sure I get you, you got an example?

Luna · « **Reply #1260 on:** November 08, 2012, 09:27:34 PM »

Hmm... like, say- "A man walks into a bar." Basic action. Then- "A man walks slowly into a bar." Describing the action.

"A man walks into a bar, slowly, because he has had one too many, having been thinking about the loss of his girlfriend." Way too many levels of description, at least according to what my friend was telling me.

And then, of course instead of using the adverb at all, you could just have written, "A man saunters into a bar." Or something... I still didn't totally get it, but I think that was what he was trying to tell me.

Kythia · « **Reply #1261 on:** November 08, 2012, 09:31:30 PM »

Ah, I get you. Hmmm, wonder if I do that *checks*

One thing I do do is get myself distracted and go off on massive tangents about only barely related things. As I said to Trieste the other day I choose to believe its adorable, but I've no doubt it makes my writing quite hard to follow. I guess thats the same thing only taken to an extreme.

Luna · « **Reply #1262 on:** November 08, 2012, 09:35:28 PM »

Aww I would go with adorable, as well.

But yeah, I'm quite sure I do that, as well. One of the reasons it takes me forever and a day to post, sometimes.

Kythia · « **Reply #1263 on:** November 08, 2012, 09:37:11 PM »

It's not having a word count that does it. At uni I could ruthlessly cut out all of these meandering diversions to get it down to within the word count. If noones limiting me though I can babble on for thousands of words about whatever happens to cross my mind.

Luna · « **Reply #1264 on:** November 08, 2012, 09:46:22 PM »

Another thing I tend to do is use the same word multiple times in one post, to the point of redundant redundancy. My favorite words or phrases to abuse seem to be 'just', 'as well', and 'herself'. Sometimes I have to go through and find other ways to word what I was trying to say, and other times I can just cut out one of those words or phrases, and the post makes just as much sense without it.

*looks up at her reply*

See what I mean?