broken and shattered

Started by Aeval, February 20, 2010, 11:23:22 PM

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Aeval

A word, a whisper ,questions- inquiring
Answers to unknown feelings required.
Truth, honesty always so rare:
Passions open: the next step do you dare?

Accepting ,expecting- emotions protecting
Touching, caressing , wishes directing-
The hurt that waits behind each door.
Be careful , be cautious with desiring more.

The tension building and hopes increasing
As your heart opens, he walks in..
All is given , signed, sealed, delivered
Only to be returned :broken and withered.

Head bent, heart in pieces..
Hope, love, desire: all ceases..
Pieces of a life blown and  scattered
Remnants torn, her soul forever battered.

“Tomorrow may be hell, but today was a good writing day, and on the good writing days nothing else matters.”
― Neil Gaiman

Kurzyk

Very chilling. I enjoyed the flow and the rhymes were smooth. Loved the buildup and how it left the reader scattered in the wind.

Thanks for sharing.

Airressa

Love this.
Beautifully written, the rhythm was perfection.
:nods in agreement to Kurzyk:
Understand the preciousness of the unfulfilled desire.
Begin to feel appreciation for the fact that the desire exists,
rather than instant disappointment that it has not manifested

WyldRanger

This was hauntingly beautiful Aeval. I wish I could write poetry, just never could get it down.