A simple poem

Started by emily t, October 20, 2011, 05:58:26 AM

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emily t

Waiting patiently, watching quietly, needing always
In the dark no one can see you cry,
In a room full of people, I feel alone.

And for those that like Haiku.

She waits, watches, needs,
Crying where no one can see,
Alone in a crowd

davidncsu

I love the haiku. In the first poem maybe change you to me may make it more powerful.