Words of inspiration

Started by Chevalier des Poissons, October 28, 2009, 05:50:03 PM

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Chevalier des Poissons

Despite the appearance, this poem has nothing to do with anyone here

A butterfly came to me today
More beautiful than my eyes could ever see
You just made me a good day
Did you come for me?

So close, so far
I don't even know who you are
So, please, please, tell me
Who are you? Are you my will to be free?

Fly, my little butterfly.
Go ahead up to the sky
Show the world your beautiful color
And come back to me and amuse me more

Butterfly, I want you.
Please, want me that way.
Look at me, say 'I do'
And let us be together every day.

You are my inspiration
You are my dear
With you I have no such thing as fear
My dear token of appreciation

Maybe you are just a dream
A wonderful deviation
A redemption for my sin
A sign of a new station

And the butterfly is gone
Again, I am all alone.
But she left me her heart, her creation
Some words of inspiration.

October 28th, 2009
Original work by me, while I was waiting the bus
-I have Maro's heart, and I promise to take good care of it-

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Butterflykiss

Light, lovely, and whimsical~

Chevalier des Poissons

Oh, thank you very much for your comment, Butterfly :3

(Goes to google 'whimsical')
-I have Maro's heart, and I promise to take good care of it-

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Zinder

It is so nice to see someone who post poems here! Thank you for this one :)

Chevalier des Poissons

Oh, Thank you very much for that comment, Zinder =D And don't worry, there are going to be more poems from me ^^
-I have Maro's heart, and I promise to take good care of it-

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Talia

Very nice read! Thanks, Chevalier Shambler de Poisson's. I do hope you do more...I have just bookmarked this.
He looks at me and my heart starts skipping beats, my face starts to glow and my eyes start to twinkle.
Imagine what he would do to me if he smiled!

Smile... it's the second best thing to do with your lips.

On's & Off's
The Oath of Drake for Group RP's
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Dramen

Very pleasant read Chevalier! It really left a nice feeling after reading it. Very well done.

Sugarman (hal)

"And in the end
The love you take
Is equal to the love you make."

My On/Off's

Chevalier des Poissons

Oh, thank you sincerely you three ^^ I am very glad and honored that my words gave you a pleasant read ^^
-I have Maro's heart, and I promise to take good care of it-

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Kaileikehi

You know how I feel about poetry Shammy, but this one... this I like. A lot.

Arhys

And now it's my turn to thank you for sharing.  I thought this was really beautiful, there's an emotional flow (flit?) to it I really like.

Chevalier des Poissons

Quote from: Arhys on January 25, 2010, 04:20:36 AM
And now it's my turn to thank you for sharing.  I thought this was really beautiful, there's an emotional flow (flit?) to it I really like.

Why, thank you Kail and thank you Arhys very much. I appreciate your comment, it means something to me :3 I am glad you like it ^^
-I have Maro's heart, and I promise to take good care of it-

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ShyMystica

Very beautiful Chevalier...you should be proud of the words you wrote here. I am a huge fan of poetry. I love the way I fluttered through the stanzas, but while it read so simplistically, it touched some very deep emotions. Very clever and very beautiful. Thank you for sharing!
Soul meets soul on lovers' lips.

Chevalier des Poissons

Quote from: ShyMystica on January 27, 2010, 04:09:51 AM
Very beautiful Chevalier...you should be proud of the words you wrote here. I am a huge fan of poetry. I love the way I fluttered through the stanzas, but while it read so simplistically, it touched some very deep emotions. Very clever and very beautiful. Thank you for sharing!

Oh, thank you very much :3 I feel honored to know you enjoyed my poem. And, since you are a fan of poetry, I would like to invite you to read my other poems too, if you wish ^^

Thank you very much for your comment, I appreciate it =3
-I have Maro's heart, and I promise to take good care of it-

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Luna Eclipse

Beautiful poem! Almost felt like I was following a butterfly as I read it.
I especially enjoyed how you concluded it.
Hope you are doing well too ^^

Chevalier des Poissons

Quote from: Luna Eclipse on February 17, 2010, 04:30:03 AM
Beautiful poem! Almost felt like I was following a butterfly as I read it.
I especially enjoyed how you concluded it.
Hope you are doing well too ^^

Miss Luna, welcome back. Long time no see ^^ I am glad you are back, and that you liked my poem =3

Thank you very much for the comment ^^
-I have Maro's heart, and I promise to take good care of it-

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PaleEnchantress

The poem portrays a feeling of someone who has succumbed to their own depression and apathy, that then feels alleviated by something that brings color and light back into his world.  Neither the joy he feels nor the object of his affection can always be with him though. However, the temporary happiness he had reminded him how worthwhile it is to continue.

That was the metaphor I got from it though I have no clue if that's what Shambler was going for.
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Chevalier des Poissons

Actually you just reproduced with utter perfection what I was feeling on that day. Very nice =D Thank you =3
-I have Maro's heart, and I promise to take good care of it-

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Little Darkling

wow this is really really beautiful! Great work!

Chevalier des Poissons

Oh, thank you very much =D I appreciate it
-I have Maro's heart, and I promise to take good care of it-

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Chevalier des Poissons

I would like to thank you all for the comments, and thank all the readers for giving a chance to read my humble words.

I have made a sequence to that poem, which is a version where the person realizes he just fell in love for the butterfly:

https://elliquiy.com/forums/index.php?topic=61853.0
-I have Maro's heart, and I promise to take good care of it-

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